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LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 12:21 PM
:xyxwave: Heyzya guys well I thought I'd let you read some of my soon to be published novel, following Ziola's fantabulous prologue! Well here's the lowdown- it's 893 pages long, 40 chapers. And it's one of the most confusing novels you'll ever read! It's set in the Canadian Rockies, in a valley called Quadron. And the characters (Well, most of them!) are wolves. And as you've probably guessed, it's called Snowfox. I'll post the synopsis in a bit. For now, here's a few pages from Chapter 34, No Going Back.

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Darkness eagerly swallowed Peak 4. The mountainside cowered under eyrie silence, lit by just one star, anticipating the moment that would be a revolution amongst the animals of the Rockies. An insignificant black wolf writhed in the snow, only noticeable by it’s blue jewel eyes. Leo struggled to move, struggled to breath, struggled to live.
He had to make it. He had to prove Beau wrong. He couldn’t die now.
Leo was wheezing, gasping for air. He couldn’t move. His entire body was numb. He could see it now. Leo could see the summit of Peak 4. All he had to do was reach it.
Just 2 more metres. Come on Leo. You can’t give up. Aren’t you the wolf with the heart of a lion?
Just 5 more steps.
The fir tree. Reach the fir tree. Then you can rest. You’ve done it. You’re there. You’ve done something no one else has done. Not even Beau.
But what about Zevi? Was he still alive? Why wasn’t he down there, helping him?
If he made it, Mutyia would help him. She would help him save Zevi.
It was close. So close he could feel it, taste it, breathe it.
You’ve got to do this, Leo. Do it for Quadron. Do it for Zevi and Smoky. Most of all, do it for yourself.

Legend
17-09-2006, 01:05 PM
Another talented writer on TiBB, it's really good that Flame. :dance:

MarkWaldorf
17-09-2006, 01:06 PM
Thats brill! I want more :laugh:

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 01:09 PM
Thanks Markie :thumbs: I'll write out the next paragraph

And thankzyou as well Ant, yaaaaay!!!! :hello:

MarkWaldorf
17-09-2006, 01:10 PM
:laugh: Aw hes a good dog, dont let him die

JakeyBoy
17-09-2006, 01:12 PM
Thats hot

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 01:45 PM
Thanks Jakey:) :hugesmile:

And when you say dog Mark, do you mean Leo? Pmsl he's a wolf!! :laugh: And don't worry, he doesn't die. Well, not in this chapter...

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 01:47 PM
KK 'No Going Back' continues here....

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The looming fir tree swallowed the moon in a pinch of eyrie blackness. Crisp, pale snowflakes danced softly on his muzzle, teasing Leo’s wispy dark fur. Those crystal eyes lapsed, drowsy, sleepy, dreamy.
His legs had betrayed him, his wounds burned, his charcoal eyelids weak from lack of sleep. But a wave of happiness gently gripped the Lionheart Wolf, like a strong paw resting on his muzzle. He was here. There. Successful. He had reached the summit of Peak 4.
‘I did it!’ He exclaimed, excitement tingling through his body, ‘I really, really did it! I climbed Peak 4! I am the first wolf to ever reach the top!’
And as he heard the sweetened words, all his wounds seemed to melt, his fears dampened, defeated.
Gazing around him, the Rebel admired his surroundings, savouring that oh-so-amazing taste. Slowly, the black clouds that feathered his vision ebbed away, so discreetly he barely noticed, disappearing into an empty hole with every other dark fear.
‘I can see!’ Leo cried, fresh tears dampening his eyes, ‘I can really see! I’m not blind anymore!’
After so many moons spent blindly wondering, his vision had returned.
And there it was. What he had longed for, dreamed for, wished for. What he had cried for, howled for, would have died for. His life, his home, his everything. Quadron. Alpha Cliff shimmering in the moonlight, the Forest of Pines towering and dark. Caribou swimming across the plains, thundering on gravely hooves. The River, like a silver ribbon strewn across the valley, and crystal-blue snow teasing the soft ground. Leo’s jaw broke into a smile- he could see home!
And around that valley, there were many other Quadrons, all the same, but unique. Other packs. Other places. Other lives. His world could have been different, not better, just different. Some other place. Some other time. Why had it come to this?

SiMoN!
17-09-2006, 03:48 PM
sorry i cba reading it yet

but i am sure it great

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 03:54 PM
You're soooooooo lazy Simon :nono:

I DELIBERATELY didn't post to much, so that you could read it.
Now you've upset meh... :sad:

lmao thankz anyways! :hello:

SiMoN!
17-09-2006, 03:58 PM
lol
i am just to lazy lol
sorry


but i bet its the best ever

JakeyBoy
17-09-2006, 03:59 PM
Thats great!

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 04:03 PM
lmao I'll probably post some more tomorrow. Darn homework is taking aaaaages :bored:
Or maybe I'll post the first page. omg I did that, like, 2 YEARS ago :shocked:

Anyways, thanks Si (Even if you are soooo lazy!!!) and thanks Jakey :hello:

Lauren
17-09-2006, 05:16 PM
Cool! :hello: Sounds like it's gonna be good


I love to write aswell, but my first ever story was about a killer clown and people got offended hahaha.

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 05:28 PM
Originally posted by LaurenFah
Cool! :hello: Sounds like it's going to be good


I love to write aswell, but my first ever story was about a killer clown and people got offended hahaha.

Pmsl awwww that's brill!! Thankz Lauren :thumbs:

Lil-Lindz
17-09-2006, 05:56 PM
Wow thats really good
Is it being published cause if it is I willb uy it he he :tongue:

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 07:36 PM
Awww that's wonerful Lindz :wink: Hopefully I've got an agent for now:)

BigSister
17-09-2006, 07:49 PM
ooh this looks good callie and im looking forward to more

Z
17-09-2006, 07:58 PM
Jesus! That's bloody amazing Callie! I am not joking when I say I would buy the full length version!!

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 07:58 PM
Aww thanks Bexi, I'm doing Science *groans* at the mo, but I should be able to put some more on tomorrow :thumbs:

BigSister
17-09-2006, 08:00 PM
yay thats good
And I would buy it too

LittleMissC
17-09-2006, 08:00 PM
Originally posted by Ziola
Jesus! That's bl***y amazing Callie! I am not joking when I say I would buy the full length version!!

Wooow thanks Zi!! :wink: Awww that's luffly, keep up with your novel, I think it's really good, particularly all the description! Anyways, hopefully they'll be more of this chapter tomorrow!! :thumbs:

Siouxsie
17-09-2006, 08:55 PM
great stuff :bigsmile:

stacey
17-09-2006, 09:33 PM
wooow thats good, i would buy that, how much? :wink:

LittleMissC
18-09-2006, 12:22 PM
Originally posted by *stacey*
wooow thats good, i would buy that, how much? :wink:

Erm well it's about the same size as the fourth Harry Potter book- probably about £4.00. Well hopefully!! :tongue: Thankz anyways Stace xx

Bells
18-09-2006, 04:43 PM
OMG finally Calz! lmao it's great, I'm soo proud of you hahaha! If that counts for a lot! :tongue: :rolleyes:

I bet you'll live your dream and become an author, oh and write loooads of bestselling novels!!! Woo! :spin2: :thumbs:

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 04:44 PM
Originally posted by ice_maiden02
OMG finally Calz! lmao it's great, I'm soo proud of you hahaha! If that counts for a lot! :tongue: :rolleyes:

I bet you'll live your dream and become an author, oh and write loooads of bestselling novels!!! Woo! :spin2: :thumbs:

lol
camr down

Bells
18-09-2006, 04:46 PM
haha I NEVER calm down!!

Wooo...

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 04:47 PM
lol
hav i been on the milkshake again

LittleMissC
18-09-2006, 04:54 PM
lmao jeez thanks Ash!! It's greeeat to be hyper lmao :hello:

Bells
18-09-2006, 04:57 PM
Totally yeah! :hugesmile:

I have to admit, I didn't realise I was being that hyper, goes to show how clueless I can get at times...:rolleyes: :tongue:

But seriously though, I do really think it's good, and I hope you can become a bestselling author and all that since you're so good at it. I always say that if you have a talent, you should develop on it. :bigsmile:

Are you feeling very hyper today?

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 05:00 PM
i am bored today

Bells
18-09-2006, 05:00 PM
Originally posted by simon_ha
lol
hav i been on the milkshake again

You what? :puzzled:

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 05:02 PM
Originally posted by ice_maiden02
Originally posted by simon_ha
lol
hav i been on the milkshake again

You what? :puzzled:

nevermind

Bells
18-09-2006, 05:04 PM
lol ok :hugesmile:

How come you're bored btw? :shocked:
Shocking!

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 05:07 PM
lol i no its unlike me that init

Bells
18-09-2006, 05:08 PM
Yeah it is!
Hope everything's ok!

You're probably just tired, especially with it being Monday again and stuff.

LittleMissC
18-09-2006, 05:09 PM
Oooo I hate Mondays!!!! :hugesmile:

SiMoN!
18-09-2006, 05:11 PM
lol i need to get up soon

that will tack for ever