What are your thoughts on my first FMP draft?

[Will.]

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[Will.]

It's called Twin and is about a woman inheriting her grandmothers fortune but it has serious consequences.

Just post your thoughts on this survey:

https://www.surveymonkey.co.uk/r/NFWCFQR

[Will.]

Maybe mention the audio when she has haired pulled, I haven't added her scream into yet.

[_Tom_]

Added some feedback! :bouncy:

[Will.]

Thanks Tom!

Things I'm changing:

cutting down the changing scene
cutting down the coffee and magazine scene
making the texts easier to read by cropping
having fake blood on the door as a note instead of a sticky note
having a picture of two twins in a frame which the good twin will look whilst the bad twin will destroy

[_Tom_]

Good ideas, yeah I did have to pause the video to read the text messages :laugh:

[Will.]

Good ideas, yeah I did have to pause the video to read the text messages :laugh:

Yeah lol, I red them and then cut it to when I stopped.

But I'm quite quick and typing and reading so I should have got a few people to try it to make sure I got the right length.

I think you can see that I've improved over the year if you compare it to my messy first project.

[Will.]

A lot of people really liked the shoe shot.