My Song. (Now With Me Singing.. Eeek)

[Conzors]

Heyyyy xx

I wrote a song, and i just wanted to share it with you all and see what you thought.

So here it is:
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I Believe In Love(At First Sight)

Looking in your eyes,
your bright shining eyes,
having a tingling feeling for from your head,
to your toes,
Your constantly thinking, of that one,
24/7.
it feels like I’m falling into a big whole,
that is known as,
love.

I believe in love.
At first sight.
I believe in you and me
I believe in eternity.
I believe me and you
Can travel though and through
The rain.
I believe in love.

As i hug you, as i hold you,
never wanting to let you go,
I feel the thumping feeling,
in your heart,
In your head,
pounding through your body,
from you,
to me,
I feel like were connected.
Oh yeah this is love

I believe in love.
At first sight.
I believe in you and me
I believe in eternity.
I believe me and you
Can travel though and through
The rain.
I believe in love.

I feel like i belong, next to you,
I feel like its my home, where i am happy,
Shone from this
Star to guide me
Sung through my
Silent heart
Like a tender kiss
So deep inside me....
Ten thousand nights of darkness
In the ether underneath this garden
You are my heart's calling....
I don’t want this to end, because,
if it does, my heart, will become a million pieces,
Ohhhhhhhhhhh

I believe in love.
At first sight.
I believe in you and me
I believe in eternity.
I believe me and you
Can travel though and through
The rain.
I believe in love.

Ohh yeah.

I Believe in love.[/b]

As Requested..
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb233/Conzors/th_IBelieveInLoveAtFirstSight.jpg (http://s206.photobucket.com/albums/bb233/Conzors/?action=view&current=IBelieveInLoveAtFirstSight.flv)
Click the big picture thing to listen lol x(Im Ill. Cut Me Some Slack PLEASE LOL)
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Sooo Wotcha think? lol

Love
Conzors
xxx

[Conzors]

?? lol

xx

[Princess]

That's really good! Although it's hard to read lyrics without a tune in your head,lol. Have you written music to it too?

[TheMac]

Yeah, nice lyrics, but it needs a tune to be called a song :P

[Loukas]

it feels like I’m falling into a big whole

Hole**

It's good Conor but im with Princess, do you have a tune to go with it?

[Kornetto]

I liked it , i just think you need to give us a tune then it will be perfect. :love:

[Conzors]

Yeahh I have tune to it. :P.

But im scared to post my singing on here. LOL. I have writted music to it aswell.. just need to record it into this song thing at school LOL.

Ty though.

xxx

[Conzors]

Okay Okay.

Ill sing it then irl post it. LOL.

[M X]

Wow, that's really good. You'll have to record it!

[TheMac]

SING SING SING!

[MrGaryy]

My ears are bleeding.

[MarkWaldorf]

Originally posted by Gazbo
My ears are bleeding.

:joker:

[Greg.!]

Originally posted by Gazbo
My ears are bleeding.

Dont Be Harsh

[DamonJ]

I LOVED it apart from when I thought you we're going to break out into a rendition of I Believe I Can Fly :laugh:

[rayheartbliss]

do you want me to be honest?

[Sam!]

I don't think the lyrics work well and where they are placed, like theres more syllables in places where there shouldn't be and the tempo changes. But overall for it being your song its alright actually. Just needs to be worked on alot. Take that constructivly.

[supernoodles!]

i think your voice would be actually quite good with some lessons,it really diddn`t sound bad at all.The songs good,better than I could do lol but some of the words just didn`t seem to fit and i kept thinking you were going to burst into i beleive i can fly ,but really good effort,you should keep working on it =]

[hannah.]

hmm.

[Conzors]

Originally posted by Gazbo
My ears are bleeding.

lol =]

[Sam!]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Gazbo
My ears are bleeding.

lol =]

I don't think he meant it jokingly.

[Conzors]

LOL Im pure embarassed now PMSL.

[rayheartbliss]

i see a potential!

Lol!!!!!!!

[Billy]

it sounded as though you were having some sort of breathing attack :\
but it was good-ish

[Conzors]

Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Gazbo
My ears are bleeding.

lol =]

I don't think he meant it jokingly.
I know.

I laughing because i know its poo. i just wanted you lot to get the thing of what the lyrics sound like. lol.

[Sam!]

I think though you need to work on word placement, cause the pattern of syllabes doesn't work. Try re-doing the first verse and chorus and working on the pattern and maybe keep the same pattern for each verse?

[Indierock&roll]

:shocked:

[rayheartbliss]

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

[Conzors]

:O LOL.

Why you lot being mean to me LOLS.

[rayheartbliss]

ahh

no...were not being mean to you!

its just..um... funny ^.^

[Wildcat!]

Originally posted by Conzors
:O LOL.

Why you lot being mean to me LOLS.

Its better than anything I, and most people here could ever write!

[Conzors]

Originally posted by Aint_mad_atcha
Originally posted by Conzors
:O LOL.

Why you lot being mean to me LOLS.

Its better than anything I, and most people here could ever write!

LOL.
I dont know whetehr to laigh or be insulted tbh. LOl.

[Wildcat!]

Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

[Conzors]

Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

[Christina]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.
I think Aint Mad Atcha is tryna be nice Conz :)

[Sam!]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

What cause I laughed at a video? We are showing our opinions on it. Its stupid for people to lie and say it was great.

[MarkWaldorf]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

Well you did post the video on a forum. What did you expect?

[Conzors]

Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

What cause I laughed at a video? We are showing our opinions on it. Its stupid for people to lie and say it was great.

I know it aint great LOL.
Im saying youve already said it was bad why need to emphasise on it? LOL.

And Okay Christina lol.

Im dead embarassed.

[rayheartbliss]

please just dont take it tooo seriuly!

were just having a laugh

[Billy]

conor, when you cant sing, then dont put videos of you singing on here, if you dont want people to say you can't sing.

[Magic]

I am going to be honest and not mean.
It was rather painfull.

A - A blatant 'I believe I can fly' rip off.
B - Are you sat on a breaking chair, 'cuz their is a creaking.
C - It sounds abit like you have ran a marathon.
D - Are you being stabbed at some points, its just your shouting really painfully.
E - Are you related to Gary Glitter, cuz at one bits its rather pedo :P (50ish from the end)
F - A 1.30ish from end, its pretty painfull with the 'Through and Through'

Good Points
A - Nice Ending
B - Ok, slighty tacky wording.

Overall, good try, however, there is a little room for improvement. :)

[Sam!]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

What cause I laughed at a video? We are showing our opinions on it. Its stupid for people to lie and say it was great.

I know it aint great LOL.
Im saying youve already said it was bad why need to emphasise on it? LOL.

And Okay Christina lol.

Im dead embarassed.

I didn't, I said things to help you improve. Obviously you complety blanked that.

[Conzors]

I didnt put it up to be good.

I oput it up to show you lot how the tune goes.

Obv i aint guna sing it myself, b ecause im not good. But you lot said you wanted to hear the tune.. so i showed you it.

lol
x

[MrGaryy]

*awaits Conor to take down the video, followed by some backlash*

[Sam!]

Originally posted by Conzors
I didnt put it up to be good.

I oput it up to show you lot how the tune goes.

Obv i aint guna sing it myself, b ecause Im not good. But you lot said you wanted to hear the tune.. so i showed you it.

lol
x

Yeh, and we commented on the tune and told you how to improve.

[Magic]

I wanna see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

[MarkWaldorf]

This is almost as bad as when Conor started YouTube blogging. :hugesmile:

[Billy]

Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

you dont
believe me

[Callum]

LOL, sorry but I didn't like it.

[Magic]

Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

you dont
believe me

What was it like?

---
And Conor, my advise isnt meant nasty, more to help.

[Conzors]

Magic.. why did you say that, you know its just an axcuse for them to start taking the piss out o that too.

Omg. lol

[MrGaryy]

Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

Oh that cringalicous thing

[Billy]

Originally posted by Magic
Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

you dont
believe me

What was it like?

---
And Conor, my advise isnt meant nasty, more to help.

It was cringecity. It was eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeekness awful

[Billy]

Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

Oh that cringalicous thing

lmao yours was just as bad.

[Magic]

Originally posted by Conzors
Magic.. why did you say that, you know its just an axcuse for them to start taking the p**s out o that too.

Omg. lol

Sorry, just it reminded me of it, even though I never saw it. :sad:

My advise?

[Xander]

Originally posted by Conzors
Originally posted by Scampi
Originally posted by rayheartbliss
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=EqRIvEW9I9w
a few inspirations maybe.

HAHAHA! PMSL!

Originally posted by Aint-Mad-Atcha-
Why? Youve got good writing skills! maybe not the best singing, but.....

Okay.
Kinda gettign insulted now.

Why, you should listen to the criticism, take it in, and when you next sing/write use what people picked up on and improve them.
Clearly your not wanting help by taking criticism.

[MrGaryy]

Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

Oh that cringalicous thing

lmao yours was just as bad.

that doesn't take away from his level of cringey ness, not to mention that I got almost totally positive feedback.

[Bells]

Can we make sure posts in here are constructive, please? I know Conzors posting this thread means he wants opinions, but that's all he wants - not people poking fun or posting videos for a laugh. If you want to spam/chat, go to Chat & Games.

I'm keeping the thread open and not deleting posts for now, but just saying. Thanks. :)

[Ninastar]

TBH I really think its quite good. I mean you really have the guts to sing the song. And the lyrics are really nice too.!!! With practice you really could do well! x

[Billy]

Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

Oh that cringalicous thing

lmao yours was just as bad.

that doesn't take away from his level of cringey ness, not to mention that I got almost totally positive feedback.

How can you critcise that and call it cringey though, when yours was just as (if not more so) bad?

[Sam!]

Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Billy21
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Magic
I want to see your Blog thing.
I missed that.

Oh that cringalicous thing

lmao yours was just as bad.

that doesn't take away from his level of cringey ness, not to mention that I got almost totally positive feedback.

How can you critcise that and call it cringey though, when yours was just as (if not more so) bad?

I wanna see it haha.

[Christina]

I love Gazbo's vlogs i'm subscribed to them.. :bigsmile:

[Sam!]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhUYbrEKbYA

I don't think it can get worse than that. :thumbs:

[MrGaryy]

Originally posted by Christina
I love Gazbo's vlogs i'm subscribed to them.. :bigsmile:

hehe thanks, my camera broke so I can't make them for a while.

Tbh, I enjoy making them, if others don't like them, it doesn't effect me.

[Christina]

Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Christina
I love Gazbo's vlogs i'm subscribed to them.. :bigsmile:

hehe thanks, my camera broke so I can't make them for a while.

Tbh, I enjoy making them, if others don't like them, it doesn't effect me. Lol thanks to you i remembered that Tom Felton [:lovedup:] was on Jack's Adrenelin Junkie [sp] and i saw it yesterday lol :tongue:

[MrGaryy]

Originally posted by Christina
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Christina
I love Gazbo's vlogs i'm subscribed to them.. :bigsmile:

hehe thanks, my camera broke so I can't make them for a while.

Tbh, I enjoy making them, if others don't like them, it doesn't effect me. Lol thanks to you i remembered that Tom Felton [:lovedup:] was on Jack's Adrenelin Junkie [sp] and i saw it yesterday lol :tongue:

Yay, I meant to remind you! Hehe, glad u saw it, he was good wasn't he?

[Christina]

Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Christina
Originally posted by Gazbo
Originally posted by Christina
I love Gazbo's vlogs i'm subscribed to them.. :bigsmile:

hehe thanks, my camera broke so I can't make them for a while.

Tbh, I enjoy making them, if others don't like them, it doesn't effect me. Lol thanks to you i remembered that Tom Felton [:lovedup:] was on Jack's Adrenelin Junkie [sp] and i saw it yesterday lol :tongue:

Yay, I meant to remind you! Hehe, glad u saw it, he was good wasn't he? Lol yeah he was! I made a bit of an innapropriate comment when he said '**** me' LMAO i was shocked at myself :blush:

[rayheartbliss]

Originally posted by Scampi
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhUYbrEKbYA

I don't think it can get worse than that. :thumbs:

whos that

o.o

[Sam!]

Originally posted by rayheartbliss
Originally posted by Scampi
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhUYbrEKbYA

I don't think it can get worse than that. :thumbs:

whos that

o.o

Gazbo.

[rayheartbliss]

no way.....

what for real

[Novo]

Originally posted by Scampi
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bhUYbrEKbYA

I don't think it can get worse than that. :thumbs:

;LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[ThisIsMarie]

:whistle:I believe I can fly...:whistle:

oh, I mean

:whistle: I believe in love. At first sight. :whistle:

[hannah.]

you sing nasally. stop it. lift your bloody soft palate up.
but i love the bit where you go a bit mental in the middle

[Spike]

Its very breathy, urm yeah I didn't like it

[Lauren]

Yeah, like hannah said it's very nasally, and lift your soft palette to accentuate your voice. It's like your glottis (voice box, basically) is strained to get out cos of it. Otherwise, bravo. :bigsmile:

[M X]

Originally posted by DamonJ
I LOVED it apart from when I thought you we're going to break out into a rendition of I Believe I Can Fly :laugh:

Omg, I thought that too!

[GhettoSuperstar]

I admire how brave you are to do something like this but I was a bit cringed.

[Conzors]

LOL.

Awwwww This has got me hated.

[supernoodles!]

no one hates you?

[Christina]

Originally posted by supernoodles!
no one hates you?

[Kornetto]

Your nice and brave. Many people wouldn't do this. Your singing was okay. Not perfect , But i liked it. You know what? Even if i was good at singing i wouldn't dare and post. I admire you. :bigsmile:

[Hugo]

*Continues playing Circus*

[Locke.]

:joker:

I thought the lyrics were ok but the singing was worse than bad. Was like you was trying to rip off I Believe I Can Fly in the chorus too, and only the best of singers can do that. But yeah, I think your song writing abilities are quite good, just don't sing in public.

[Novo]

well well well

justin timberlake watch out

[Magic]

I had to...
:)

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb233/Conzors/th_IBelieveInLoveAtFirstSight.jpg (http://s206.photobucket.com/albums/bb233/Conzors/?action=view&current=IBelieveInLoveAtFirstSight.flv)