Okey - I decided to post an overview of what we're doing..

The characters -

Madonna - He is very strong minded, but always needs to ask others if he thinks his decisions are the right ones.

Twilight - Madonnas puppy.. is all cute and innocent :angel:

Tom - Is a highly irritating parrot, although is pretty amusing.. always imitates what Madonna is saying, and exaggerates everything

Fom - Goes on and on about his record deal he HAS to get by the end of the journey, and it HAS to be an amazing one. Also someone mention his coat xD

Andy - 'Manly' man, hates Britney and tries to cause controversy all the time.

Dezzy - What will they find Dezzy up to, when they finally track down the beloved Britney?

Plot of story:

(copied from up there and changed a bit ^)

Madonna is on a quest with his puppy Twilight, and his parrot, Tom(RocksUrSocks.. but we will call him Tom) to find Britney, the legend. Madonna needs a new username change to Britney, but needs to get permission from the lady herself, so he decides to track her down. On his travels he meets Fom, a young lad on the search of a record deal. Despite hating Britney, he decides to travel with Madonna, in the hope Britney can hear him sing and get him signed by a label. Also on their travels they meet Andy, a manish man with a hate of Britney, and couldn't be more disgusted at the idea of going to find her. However, Andy comes up with an evil plan to kill queen Britney herself.. but little does Andy know, queen Britney never even existed... but the question? Who is Britney?

Well, what will they find when they eventually find 'queen Britney'?

Here is where we have the 2 endings .. we will give them both snappy titles, which don't give to much away... but gets the forum guessing

Who's doing what?

Sam - Start
Me - Middle
Tom - Endings, once we have discussed the 2 endings, or if you want to write the drag one first you can, as I think that's a great idea :3

Where should we stop the 'middle'? I think it should be just as they set eyes on Britney, and then we stop, make the poll and they all get to decide what the outcome is :)


Nobody write over 333 words... but if you do go over, don't worry to much, I will check anyway and then the next person can write a little less.. or we can take some stuff out that's not needed :) (Word count.. I'm not gonna count them 1 by 1 :tongue:)


How does that grab y'll?

Sounds perfect, i'm just finishing up the beginning then I'll post it.

OK , i am slightly over. I wrote 422 words, but I suppose the end of the beginning can be changed to fit your middle part Nicky.

He just couldn't believe it. He was going to have to change his name again.
"But mum, I don't want to change it anymore. I'm quite fine as Madonna" the boy whimpered.
"You're always embarrassing me. Postandpollmad? You made us the laughing stock at the TiBB convention" his mother yelled.
Tears rolled down his face. "Then what will I be mother?" he asked, but she just ignored him. He glanced around the room until it hit him.
Madonna had a parrot called Tom, whom he loved very much.
“Britney Britney” croaked the parrot. Madonna stood confused. He caught the TV in the back of his eye, which had 4music on. They were display Britney’s greatest hits.
He giggled to himself. "Mother, I am going to be Britney Spears!" BANG. IT was too late His mother had grabbed his arm, thrown him out the door, and slammed it behind him.
Madonna was the forum clown. He was a lonely boy who only ever wanted to be loved by his fellow TiBBers. He sat down on his porch feeling sorry for himself.
“At least I’ve got you Twilight!” he smiled, trying to remain positive. He stroked his fluffy shi-tzu. “Am I really a laughing stock?” He stood up abruptly and started walking down the road. I’ve been the joke of the forum far too long. I’m going to be Britney and I don’t care who knows it!
“You better ask her herself” croaked Tom the parrot, but he already knew what he had to do.
He had been walking for almost eight hours now. Dehydrated, miserable and struggling, he popped into a local shop for a bottle of water. However his thoughts were distracted when he saw a scruffy haired man with a melodious voice.
“I don’t suppose you have any record deals do you?” the man said to the cashier.
“No, but we do have offers on all frozen goods in store today.” she replied. The man sighed, picking up his carrier bag.
“Hi I’m Madonna. What’s up?” he said.
“Hi Madonna. I’m Fom. I’ve been across this whole town and no one has a record deal.”
“I’m going to see Britney Spears. Do you want to come with me”
Fom stared blankly. “I’m not really a Britney fan.”
“But there will be people there from her record label. Maybe you could sing to them! Once they’ve heard you they won’t be able to resist!
Fom cheekily smiled to himself. “Do you really think?”
Madonna nodded. He had made his first friend.

That first bit is fab! Here is the middle -
It's now 427 words.. because of the change!

The 2 friends carried on along the road, on their quest to find queen Britney. Would she allow Madonna the name change? Would she get Fom his dream record contract? They needed to get there as quickly as they could.
A few hours later, the night was starting to draw in, and the stars began to shine brightly, one by one. The pair started to sing ‘Womanizer’, one of Britney’s amazing hits, to kill time, and give each other a bit of hope. In the distance, they saw a little figure, laughing hysterically at pointing towards them.
Confused, Fom and Madonna went over to the young lad, who now had tears running down his face.
“You... like... Britney Spears?” The quite butch and ‘manly’ man exclaimed, trying to keep a straight face and not blurt anymore laughter out. Fom and Madonna looked at each other in bewilderment. What a weird person, they both thought.
“Umm... yea... we’re off to find her, I need a username change on a forum, so I need to get her permission.”
“And I’m going to get a record contract when we finally find her!” Fom added with excitement. Andy bursts out laughing once more.
“Can I come along then please? I haven’t had a good laugh in ages! Oh, by the way, I am Andy.” Fom and Madonna, still confused, nod at one another and the three carry on up the long road.
As they walk, Andy comes up with a plan. He will finally kill off the beloved Britney... and will no longer have to put up with the terrible music and petty arguments that seem to be emerging daily.
A few hours on, they are all tired, hungry and thirsty, and considering giving up hope to find Queen Britney. But at this moment, their luck changes. In the distance, they see an enormous sign, which reads ‘Britney Land’. They all squeal, unable to control their excitement, they start running, getting faster and faster, and run into the ‘The world of Britney’.
As they enter the magical world, they see something in the distance, sparkling and glistening in the sun’s rays.
“No, it can’t be, can it?” Madonna stares at the magnificent figure.
“Oh my God, is it really her?” Asked Fom, taking his old coat off and brushing himself down, in an attempt to look handsome.
“HAHAHA, look at the state of it” Giggled Andy, not taking any notice that half the kingdom could hear him. They all went silent, stood still and stared at the sight in front of them.

This is 45 words -

What can tremendous trio see? Is this Madonna’s first step into get permission to change his username? Will Fom finally get that record deal he has always dreamed of? Will Andy succeed in the killing of the idol? What will happen in ‘Britney Land?’

Oh btww - Britney World is like Dollywood... but the Britney version xD

Omg!

The rules changed!

It was 900 words yesterday.. Sam said it was 1000 and now it's 1500!!

Gonna add something on the end of the middle xD

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Isn't yours present?

It's mostly speech so I dunno.. lemme sort mine out :3

I dunno. I think we've done different types of present tense.

Yours sounds a bit like stage directions? "Madonna stares at the magnificent.."

I'm not sure :conf2:

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I think it sounds ok?

Okey, we will sort the tenses out after it's all done!

We have written exactly 900 words, so if Tom writes the ending/s, use as many words as you like, then afterwards we will add stuff and make it better :3

Sounds good :hugesmile:

:bigsmile:

I think this is gonna be good!

Its 849 words, I just checked :tongue:

Anyway sounds good so far but before I write the endings I need to know what the scenarios are

I think we should kill someone off as well, maybe Fom if he gets his record deal :tongue:

Including the little part in italics it's 900 :tongue:

Well, as Andy is out to kill Britney, maybe he could kill Britney, then they find out it's Dezzy in drag, for one ending..

and the other Fom get's his record deal, but the catch is, is that Dezzy and him have to be a pair, and their first single must be womanizer (the Dezzy version :tongue:)

or something xD

Well I was thinking Britney could be some raging witch who they see attacking the shrine of Christina or Lady Gaga with an umbrella ... she is nothing like they say in the media :joker:

A raging witch LOL!

Well, the media don't say that, that's very true!

Some random weird maniac HAHA!

It would be funny xD

You can write that one - it sounds randomly cool!

I think Andy should get to kill someone though :tongue:

I like the idea but Matt said Britney can't be a character.

Dezzy in drag has gotta be a scenario. :tongue:

Dezzy in drag being Britney?

Yea - when they find Britney it's actually Dezzy in drag :tongue:

Ending 1

Stood before them was a woman with an umbrella, attacking the shrine of Christina. She had her back turned to them.
"She looks like Jade" screeched Andy, followed by a mock laugh.
"No she doesn't, its blatantly Britney and shes going to get me a recording deal" said Fom in a tone of excitement.
"Madonna is so much better looking in the flesh" joked Madonna, which his parrot repeated. "She can still change my username though, I'm sooooo excited I can go and make more polls about pointless things then!!"
She turned round in what felt like them to slow motion. Suddenly the sun went in, and grey clouds quickly moved overhead. Everyone gasped as this horrific, witch like person stood before them.
It wasn't Britney, but an impersonator. Only the parrot realised.
"Oh my god its Britney, ahhhhhhh, I love you, I've got all your singles and ... ahhhhhh its BRITNEY YOU CAN BE MY NEW OBSESSION!!!!!!!!!!!!" screeched Madonna at the top of his lungs in the highest pitch ever.
But as the impersonator was distracted, Andy was creeping closer ... and closer ... and closer ...
"Can you get me a record deal? I've been searching for ages. I'm your biggest fan", Fom said desperately in a bid to secure his future.
"LIAR" roared the impersonator, "I know you're a Kelly Clarkson fan and for that reason, you won't get a contract unless ...."
"Unless what?" cried Fom
".... you realise a Britney Spears tribute album, featuring all her greatest hits including 'I'm not a Girl' and 'Im a Slave 4 U'".
Madonna laughed, but Fom agreed and just as they were shaking on a deal, Andy had picked up the umbrella used by the impersonator to destroy the shrine of Christina and with 3 blows to the head, the impersonator fell to the floor.

307 ............

Ooo sounds good!

Might need to be a bit more lengthly! But it's looking good so far!

Oh I know, thats only when they've seen her, its literally 10 seconds on from where you ended :tongue:

I was thinking both endings could start like that.

Need to add in more conversation, move it along a bit quicker and bring it to an end.

But I don't exactly know how ending one will go ... so suggestions?

As in what 2 scenarios will we say are the options to be able to vote for? Its all a bit vague atm and I need something proper to work towards

LOL I was gonna say xD

Yea, if both endings start like that, then stop it there... they can decide :3

I will have a think about the endings proper, been with friends all afternoon.. so I've been posted short and swift xD

One ending has to be Dezzy in drag.. so if you write that we can think of the other :bigsmile:

Just add some stuff of your own, it's your section :bigsmile:

What if ... Andy succeeds in killing Britney (when they realise its Dezzy) so Fom doesn't get his record deal, Madonna doesn't get his name change .....

and

Andy gets killed by Dezzy, Fom gets his record deal but has to record Britney covers, Madonna gets the name change but to something dodgy ............

oo now they sound good!

Matt said we might not be allowed both endings.. so don't write them both!

So whichever you like best, so first!

It's up to you, unless you want me to pick :)

Ooh love the ending previews. :spin2:

Why aren't we allowed?

Not sure, I was just talking to Matt earlier and he was asking if he could read our story so far, so I said yea it's in our thread..

and he said ok, and then I said about our 2 endings, and that not being done yet though, and he was like what do you mean? So I explained and he had to ask James if it's allowed for the task D:

Well I think it should be, there were no rules saying we couldn't :tongue:

Exactly my point :tongue:

Yeah, lets have two. If Matt wants to add rules when its too late though we cant stop him :tongue:

Indeed!

Also, I think we should have graphics, but the rule has gone off the start?

Matthew ........ assistance needed!!

LOL - I really like the last bit xD

realise should be release but other than that it sounds great!!

Do you think, when the parrot realises its an impersonator, we should put it's Dezzy? Otherwise Dezzy isn't mentioned :\

xx

Dezzy is the impersonator as to be found out just after that bit :tongue:, and no idea why the hell I wrote realise instead of release :blush2:

Haha great ending. :thumbs:

Stood before them was a woman with an umbrella, attacking the shrine of Christina. She had her back turned to them.
"She looks like Jade" screeched Andy, followed by a mock laugh.
"No she doesn't, its blatantly Britney and shes going to get me a recording deal" said Fom in a tone of excitement.
"Madonna is so much better looking in the flesh" joked Madonna, which his parrot repeated. "She can still change my username though, I'm sooooo excited I can go and make more polls about pointless things then!!"
She turned round in what felt like them to slow motion. Suddenly the sun went in, and grey clouds quickly moved overhead. Everyone gasped as this horrific, witch like person stood before them.
It wasn't Britney, but an impersonator. Only the parrot realised.
"Oh my god its Britney, ahhhhhhh, I love you, I've got all your singles and ... ahhhhhh its BRITNEY YOU CAN BE MY NEW OBSESSION!!!!!!!!!!!!" screeched Madonna at the top of his lungs in the highest pitch ever.
But as the impersonator was distracted, Andy was creeping closer ... and closer ... and closer ...
"Can you get me a record deal? I've been searching for ages. I'm your biggest fan", Fom said desperately in a bid to secure his future.
"LIAR" roared the impersonator, "I know you're a Kelly Clarkson fan and for that reason, you won't get a contract unless ...."
"Unless what?" cried Fom
".... you release a Britney Spears tribute album, featuring all her greatest hits including 'I'm not a Girl' and 'Im a Slave 4 U'".
Madonna laughed, but Fom agreed and just as they were shaking on a deal, Andy had picked up the umbrella used by the impersonator to destroy the shrine of Christina and with 3 blows to the head, the impersonator fell to the floor.
Andy, Madonna, Tom and Twighlight all looked on in disbelief as they realised it wasn't Queen Britney they had killed, but Dezzy.
"YOU B*STARDS" screamed Fom, "I ALMOST HAD A DEAL THERE".
"Erm ... no you never, its Dezzy" laughed Andy.
"I never got my username change, I still want it, this time to pay tribute to pay new hero ... DEZZY!"

The quest for Fom's record deal continues ...

(Ending 1- 377 words)

HAHA!

Amazing! :bigsmile:

Mum came in as I was reading that, and she started asking me about it so I had to explain it all xD