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Shaun 13-04-2010 11:01 PM

uh. .OMG

Tom4784 13-04-2010 11:18 PM

Ah I'll get started on the next two tommorow, If it goes as well as it's going in my head they'll be great.

Tom4784 14-04-2010 07:31 PM

Episode 5
The Butterfly Effect
PART 1


It started off as just another day. The Students went to school, The parents did what they did and everybody kept their secrets.....But some secrets have a tendency to reveal themselves... Nobody knew that on that day many lives would change forever.....

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Patrick was at his locker, it was extremely tidy and well organized with all his books in alphabetical order and colour coded neatly. Patrick despised messes and would often go out of his way to keep his locker in pristine condition, one time after spotting a drop of spilt ink in one of the corners he spent an hour scrubbing every inch of it with bleach until his fingers were raw and bloody. Overall though the locker was very much ordinary except for one small detail. At the back of the locker there was a small etching of a rough butterfly with a broken wing. Patrick stared at the etching, entranced by it before he placed a leather bound object into the locker. It was going to happen today....

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As soon as Gary left the house Lili barricaded herself in the bathroom. She was pacing it frantically, how could she have been so stupid? She thought to herself as she checked her watch, She looked at herself in the mirror. She was a grown woman having an affair with a teenager and not only that but the teenager was the son of her oldest friend. She should have stopped it long ago but the thrill of it all was too much to give up, Zee made her feel like a teenager again and she had become addicted to that feeling. For the first time she realised she was heading down a dangerous and destructive path and she couldn't stop even if she wanted to as in that moment she realised something else, something that would make her run down that path no matter what.

Lili snapped out of her thoughts and remembered what she was pacing for, she looked down at the object in her hand and gasped. Her heart missed a beat and her stomach sank, she felt the object clatter against the floor. She looked away and closed her eyes, What was she going to do now? She looked down again hoping to find a different answer but she only found the same one she had before.

'Pregnant'

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Shaun: How rude!
Patrick smashed past Shaun in the school corridors, causing her to fall over.
Shaun: A little help please?
She called after him but he only replied with a look of pure disdain before turning the corner.
Shaun: *****ing Schizoid!
She said loudly. She dusted herself off and grabbed her bag.
Jack: Are you okay?
She jumped before replying with a generic answer. It was the first time Jack had spoken to her. As she got to her feet and walked away he called after her.
Jack: We've got Setanta next, why don't I walk you to class?
'What was his game?' Shaun thought to herself, he near enough stalked her last week and now he wants to be friends? Shaun made a mental note to never get a pet rabbit while he was around.
Jack: I think we got off to a bad start, I'm sorry about last week can we start again?
He asked nicely, Shaun didn't buy it for a minute but she nodded to keep him sweet.
Jack: Ah good, I think we're gonna be great friends Natalya.

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It was time for Lunch and Jen, Mark and Gary occupied their usual place on the steps.

Gary: I don't think that Salad agreed with me.
Jen looked at Gary and concurred, She looked ill all day and worse now.
Jen: Maybe you should see if you can go home.
Gary: Yeah I think I will, come on Mark you mess. You can walk with me.
As the two girls left her alone she began to read her book, she was kind of happy to be by herself. She loved her friends but also liked her own company.
Jen: Oh Bill, why can't you be real....
Nathan: Who's Bill?
Jen jumped a little before going red with embarrassment.
Jen: Oh er.... no one in particular.
Nathan: Oh...
They stood in an awkward silence for a moment.
Jen: Erm, is there something you want?
Nathan: Oh yeah, Can I sit down? I wanna talk to you.
Jen: It's a free country.
Nathan parked himself next to her.
Nathan: I was wondering if you were doing anything tonight and if you wanted to go out if you're not?
He said quietly, Jen didn't know what to say. She didn't dislike Nathan but she didn't think he liked her either considering the awkwardness of how they met. Jen was about to decline when she saw Lemonjam a distance away, he seemed to be watching them with an intense look upon his face. It was strange he never paid much attention to her before, could it be that he's jealous? Jen had an idea, it wasn't a nice idea but it would get her what she wanted most.
Jen: I'd LOVE to, What time are you gonna pick me up?

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Jack was not a normal teenager, He was Jack Tower, a child prodigy and the youngest CIA agent there had ever been. He'd been tasked with getting close to Natalya Fahekovika in order to uncover information about her older sister Lauren. There was an incident in Moscow that resulted in a number of deaths and Natalya leaving the country, The details of what happened were sketchy but it was believed that Lauren was integral to causing it. Normally Jack would just haul Natalya in for questioning but this case had to be handled differently. If he tried to strong-arm her into talking it would just cause her to clam up and run. He needed her trust.

Shaun: Who are you? What do you want from me and who did you know my name?
Jack: I'm Jack and I'm a CIA agent, I'm here for information and I know your name because of intel from HQ. Any more questions?
Shaun was startled by his honesty, she knew what he wanted but she decided to play dumb.
Shaun: What kind of information?
Jack: About the incident in Moscow of course and about Lauren.
Shaun tensed at the mention of her sister. She hadn't seen her older sister in years.
Shaun: I don't know anything about what happened, all I know is that I was shipped away as quickly as possible.
She had lied and she could tell that Jack didn't buy it, he however let it go.
Jack: Would Mr Sticks know anything?
Shaun: Ha! My father knows less then I do, I never knew him before I arrived here and he isn't Lauren's father.
Jack: I see, well here's my card, if you remember or recall anything please tell me as I'm sure you know Moscow is still sore over this. We might be the only people who can help you and your sister.
He left her to think about what he said, It was probably a mistake to reveal his hand like that but he had told her everything for a reason. He had got nothing left to hide and now Shaun could begin to hopefully trust him.

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It was evening and Lili had just let Zee in (The house, you perverts). She decided to tell him as soon as possible about the baby.

Zee: You never call me over this late, Couldn't wait for tomorrow?
He said with a cheeky grin on his face.
Lili; I needed to talk to you, come through to the living room.
As they walked through the door a wail of sirens pierced the street outside as a parade of flashing lights, police cars and what seemed to be an ambulance passed by.
Zee: I wonder where they're heading.
Lili: I don't know, listen there's something I need to tell you.
She held his hand.
Lili: I'm pregnant.

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Gary had been sleeping since she got back from school, When she awoke it was dark outside and she couldn't believe she had slept for so long. The sleep had done her a world and she felt a lot better then she had during the day. As she woke up she heard her mother downstairs talking to somebody.

Lili: I need to see you, it's really important.
Gary guessed that she was on the phone and smiled as she realised it was probably Stu. Lili didn't usually invite men over when Gary was around so she guessed that Lili thought she was out. Instead of messing up her plans Gary decided to listen to her iPod and try to get some more sleep.

Sirens had woken Gary from her sleep, she looked at the clock and realised she had only been asleep for a short while. She heard some muffled voices downstairs. One was her mother but she didn't recognize the other which confused Gary greatly, Did that mean Lili was seeing someone else? Her confusion turned into curiosity and she decided to get a peak at this mysterious suitor. She put on her bathrobe and silently sneaked down the stairs, the voices were becoming a lot clearer and she realised she recognized the man's voice although she couldn't quite place it. She had reached the bottom of the stairs and could see into the Living Room. She saw Lili....and Zee? 'What the hell is he doing here' She thought.

Lili: I don't know, listen there's something I need to tell you.
Gary watched as Lili grabbed Zee's hand.
Lili: I'm pregnant.

Gary's mouth dropped open as everything clicked into place.

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A FEW HOURS EARLIER

School had just finished, the students were all leaving but Patrick was sitting in a hidden corner of one of the courtyards. Patrick had been on edge all day, His mind preoccupied with thoughts of what was going to happen. For days Patrick had thought of nothing else but now the day had come he became nervous. He flipped flopped on the idea of going ahead with it all day, however as he looked at the object his determination returned. He smiled as he realised that after days of thinking of nothing else, he was going to do it. He pulled at one end of the the object to reveal a knife. It was glistening with cleanliness and he could see his reflection in it, he had spent hours cleaning it for this day. He had never felt such clarity before, the smile on his face grew wider as he thought about what he was going to do. He hummed a familiar tune before singing to himself.

'1, 2 I'm coming for you
3, 4 Don't try locking the door
5, 6 Don't play any tricks
7, 8 Gonna eviscerate...
9,10 Dezzy won't breathe again'

Tom4784 14-04-2010 07:32 PM

I was gonna do both parts today but that one took AGES so I'll do the next part tommorow or Friday.

Z 14-04-2010 07:52 PM

:O Aaah that was intense! PATRICK DON'T DO IT -screams- oooh Gary knows... shocking!!

Rob 14-04-2010 07:53 PM

very good as usual

Tom4784 14-04-2010 10:49 PM

Thanks guys, it was a fun episode to write although I'm looking foward to doing the next few.

MrGaryy 14-04-2010 11:36 PM

ooh my fave so far <3

Patrick 14-04-2010 11:45 PM

LOL at the last part :p

That was a great episode Dezzy.

Tom4784 15-04-2010 12:18 AM

Thanks Guys! It means a lot.

Jessica. 15-04-2010 01:56 AM

Very good! I'm loving the Patrick/Dezzy and the Shaun/Russia storylines.

Twilight 15-04-2010 12:00 PM

Ohh i'm loving this<3

CaraRawr 15-04-2010 01:37 PM

omg this keeps getting better!

Tom4784 15-04-2010 01:41 PM

Thanks Guys :bigsmile:

Tom4784 16-04-2010 08:25 PM

Episode 6
The Butterfly Effect
PART 2


Gary: WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS!?
She screamed at Zee and Lili. They jumped out their seats and looked at her with surprised expressions.

Lili: Oh my god, I-I can explain!
Gary: What? There was a strong gust of wind and you fell on him? HE'S TWO MONTHS YOUNGER THEN ME! God! I feel sick....Oh my god....
Gary remembered what she heard.
Gary: You're...You're pregnant.....
She felt dizzy.
Zee: Gary, I'm....
Gary: DON'T TALK TO ME! You were my friend and this was going on behind my back....I hate you.
It was overwhelming, The Dizziness increased.
Lili: Gary Don't -
Gary: This is so fucked up. You're pregnant, What's gonna happen now?
Lili: I don't know, We need to talk this through.
Gary: No...there's nothing to talk about. This ends here, Get out Zee or I'll throw you out.
Zee: Wait-
Gary: GET OUT! GET OUT!
She grabbed Zee's chair and pulled him to the door.
Lili: Stop! Please!
Gary: No, I'm ending this, we're getting rid of the baby and you're NEVER seeing him again.
Lili: BUT I LOVE HIM!!!
she screamed in an over dramatic fashion. Gary and Zee were stopped in their tracks, shocked at Lili's admission.

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Nathan arrived at Jen's house perfectly on time, He was going to take Jen to a local restaurant. It wasn't flashy but it wasn't a dive but it had good food and a nice atmosphere, perfect for a first date. When Jen opened the door Nathan's mouth dropped open.

If truth be told Jen was a bit of a tomboy, she didn't really care for fashion and generally just wore what she was comfortable in. Tonight however was different, She carefully picked out her outfit and spent ages on her hair and make-up and it was worth it to see Nathan's shocked expression. Recovering from the shock Nathan smiled at her with that goofy grin.

Nathan: You look beautiful
He said shyly.
Jen: Thanks, shall we get going?

Nothing much was said in the car so Nathan decided to plug the silence with music and Lionel Ritchie was soon blasting out. Jen grimaced and Nathan noticed.

Nathan: Oh Yeah, you're not a fan of Lionel aren't you? Oh well, it's a good thing I brought backup!
He changed the CDs and the songs of Bob Dylan played out in the car. Jen could tell Nathan wasn't really a fan but she thought it was sweet how he played it anyway.

Jen: You know what, Lionel's okay.
She changed it back to Lionel Ritchie and played the first track, 'All Night Long' began and they laughed awkwardly. 'Maybe this wouldn't be as bad as I thought' Jen pondered, she felt a bit guilty for writing him off before and even more so for why she went out with him in the first place.

When they arrived at the restaurant it was surprisingly busy, Nathan blanched a little before regaining his confidence. He didn't book any reservations as he was sure they wouldn't be that busy, he hoped there were some tables left otherwise he'd look like an idiot.... As they walked into the Restaurant they saw that from what they could see it was packed. Nathan walked up to the person on the front desk. The man saw them coming, he subtly rolled his eyes before adopting a friendlier attitude.

Remy: Bonjour! I am Remy and I shall be your 'ost for ze night! What can I do for you Monsieur?
Nathan: Can I have a table for two please?
Remy: Ah, I regret to inform you but ze last table for two was taken a few minutes ago. We 'ave a table for four available but zat will cost double I'm afraid due to it being in ze V.I.P area.
Nathan: Oh.....
He only had enough for a normal table, 'Why the hell didn't I make a reservation?!' he thought to himself. Jen quietly sighed, it looked like she overestimated him after all.
Lemonjam: We could double up if you like?
Lemonjam had just arrived with his date GypsyGoth, he had also 'forgotten' to reserve a table. He smiled at Jen, 'You're not the only one who can play the Jealousy game' He thought.
Remy: Ah! Tres Bien! Come right this way Monsieurs et Mademoiselles!
He lead them to the back of the restaurant which was roped off and considerably nicer then the rest. Before they could order the ambulance and police cars drove past the restaurant with the sirens blaring, All four of them wondered what happened briefly before carrying on with ordering.
Remy: Sacre Bleu! I haven't seen that many flashing lights since since I gave up ze Ketamine!

Jen ignored him, she just realised how awkward this night had just become.....

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Gary: This can't be happening.
She had calmed down but she was still furious with Zee and Lili, after Lili's admission Gary had run to her room and locked herself in. She couldn't handle it all, it was too much.
Lili: Gary? We need to talk, please come out.
She said softly. Gary wiped her eyes and breathed in and out slowly. She couldn't stay in her room forever. She opened the door to see Lili looking incredibly concerned, she felt her anger return but she kept her cool. They returned to the living room, Gary was surprised to see Zee still here.
Gary: What the hell is he still doing here!
Zee: I'm a part of this, So I'm gonna stay until we sort this out.
Gary: There's nothing to sort out, you two are gonna stop seeing each other. That's it.
Zee: Oh yeah and what about the baby?
Gary: Do I need to spell it out?
Gary said quietly. Lili shook her head involuntarily at this to which Gary noticed.
Gary: What's the plan then Mom? Are you gonna stay together and raise that baby with Daddy Dead Legs over there?
Lili: GARY!
Zee looked away, he was used to jibes about his condition but it hurt hearing it from somebody he considered a friend.
Gary: I'm being realistic! It's not going to work.
Zee: I'll make it work.
Gary laughed cruelly at Zee
Gary: Okay then.
She got up and walked over to the phone.
Gary: If you want to be a big ol' happy family then we have to tell Wombai now don't we?
Zee: No, please don't!
Gary: If you go ahead with this I will tell everyone, your lives will be a living hell.
Lili: Why are you doing this to me?
Gary: WHY DID YOU DO THIS TO ME?!
Lili: Please Gary, think about what you're saying....
Gary wasn't listening, she had enough of all this. She grabbed her keys and stormed out the house. Lili and Zee called after her but she didn't give them a second thought. She heard the sirens in the distance but her mind was too preoccupied to care.

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HALF AN HOUR EARLIER

Shaun had just finished her Pilate's class when she was nearly ran over on her way back home by a speeding driver in a van. She shouted a bunch of obscenities at the driver before realizing it was Patrick. She pondered for a moment what he was up to as she knew he lived in a different area in the town. She guessed from the direction he was heading that he was going to Dezzy's probably to drop off a late article or something she assumed. She continued on walking but she felt a strange feeling that she was missing something. She checked her person but she hadn't dropped or forgotten anything at the class but the feeling in her gut persisted. She looked back at where Patrick nearly ran over but nothing was there. 'Wait...Patrick?' she thought, she was sure she had forgotten something important, could it have been related to him?.

The answer licked in her head without warning and she cast her mind back to that lesson weeks ago when she was partnered with Patrick, that creepy photo....She had seen it before, it was a Tutor Group photo....She had seen it before because her friend Dezzy was in that group......she felt a cold shock when she realised that it was his face missing from the photograph. Shaun turned around and headed for Dezzy's. It might be nothing and she might look like a fool for being wrong but she didn't want to regret not doing anything if she was right.

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Dezzy had just finished watching a program on TV when he looked over at the unfinished article on his laptop, He'd been trying to finish it since he got back but he just couldn't find the right words so instead he decided to watch TV. He trudged his bed and attempted to type but he just couldn't concentrate. He decided to fix himself a snack, he left his bedroom walked onto the landing of the second floor of his house. It was dark, Dezzy had been in his room since he got back and his parents were on a business trip so no one had turned on the lights. Dezzy didn't like his house at night, especially in the dark as the light from the street lamps outside would cast weird shapes and shadows within the house. He had lost count of how many times he jumped because he thought he saw something that turned out to be nothing but a shadow caused by the odd lamp.

As he descended down the stairs he heard heavy breathing and felt guilty, he had forgotten about his pet dog Max, the poor thing must be gasping for something to eat and a run around in the garden. As he headed for the kitchen he passed the open living room door and jumped as he thought he saw something moving in the corner of his eye from within the room. 'Not again Dezzy, stop trying to scare yourself there's nothing there' he shut the door without taking any time to look inside. When he got to the kitchen he opened a door that lead off from the kitchen, his dog max came barreling out happily. Dezzy made a fuss of him for a while before making himself a quick sandwich. After he finished, he served up Max's dinner and returned to his bedroom. He passed the living room and closed the door out of habit, upon doing this he had a strange feeling of Deja Vu but he ignored it.

He had just finished the article and went to play on his Xbox when he heard a crash from downstairs. He groaned.

Dezzy: What has he broken now?
He walked through the still dark house, his dog had wreaked havoc with his waterbowl it seemed as the floor of the corridor leading to the kitchen was soaking. He turned on the kitchen light and saw that the floor was covered in the remains of a broken pot. He sighed before grabbing a bin bag, as he knelt down to pick up the pieces when the kitchen light went out.

Dezzy: Not now...
He stood up and went to grab a spare lightbulb when he felt something heavy hit him in the face. He was knocked back but managed to grab whatever had been thrown at him. It was a bit heavy and furry and soaking wet.... Wait...

The light switched back on and Dezzy screamed and jumped back as he realised that he was holding the bloody corpse of his dog.

Patrick: I'm not a fan of dogs.
Dezzy looked at the hallway to see Patrick standing there, he looked deranged. There were bloody footprints on the kitchen floor leading to where Dezzy stood, he realised the grim truth that it wasn't water he was treading in when he walked down the hallway. Before he could say anything Patrick charged at him with a bloody knife raised. Patrick slashed at him and Dezzy felt the blade cut into his cheek. He cried out in anger and ran to the opposite side of the kitchen counter. Patrick swayed at the other end laughing, Dezzy had trapped himself.
Patrick: Whatcha gonna do now Dezzy?
He taunted.

Once again he didn't give Dezzy a chance to answer as he leaped over the counter and aimed a stab towards Dezzy's throat. Dezzy managed to leap out the way as Patrick connected with a cupboard.
Patrick: Oof!
Dezzy got back on his feet and ran for to the hallway , he looked back to see that Patrick had a bloody nose, Patrick screamed out in fury and gave chase. Dezzy ran straight for the door but he realised it was locked and that his keys were in his bedroom.
Dezzy GODAMNIT!
He ran up a few stairs when he felt Patrick's hand grab his ankle. He fell and hit his head on a step. He tried to grab hold of the railings to regain balance but Patrick had an iron grip on his foot. He turned around to see Patrick grinning at him madly, his knife positioned at Dezzy's Achilles Tendon.
Dezzy: No!
With his free foot he aimed a kick at Patrick's stomach which caused him to double over. He got back to his feet and ran up the stairs but within milliseconds he heard Patrick right behind him. He ducked as he saw Patrick going in for a stab in a nearby mirror and then pushed him against the railings when he missed.

Patrick was getting more furious and unhinged by the second, every failed attempt just gave him more drive to tear Dezzy apart. When Dezzy reached the top of the stairs he grabbed an ornament from the side and threw it at Patrick, Patrick saw it coming though and grabbed it out the air and laughed. He threw it back but Dezzy ran to the side and it hit the mirror. Dezzy didn't see the destruction as he bolted into his bedroom and shut the door. Patrick began banging at it and screaming like an enraged animal. Dezzy went straight for his phone but saw that it was dead, he screamed in frustration as he realised he forgot to charge it. He tried the landline but it was dead like the mobile and then he used his laptop but there was no Internet connection. Dezzy was starting to become hysterical as he realised that Patrick had planned this well. He held his head as he tried to think of a plan when he looked at the window, 'Yes!' he thought ecstatically in his head. He had a Trampoline in the garden that he used to play with when he was a kid. He could jump down from his window and escape through the garden gate. He opened the window and felt the colour drain from his face as he saw that the trampoline had been shredded, Patrick was not going to make it that easy however he spotted the trellis in between his room and his parents'. He grabbed his front door key and carefully climbed out the window and across the trellis to the other room. As he carefully and quietly jumped into the room he heard Patrick continuing to bang against the door of his room.
Patrick: Oh Dezzy don't make this harder on yourself, every minute you make me wait will be another minute of me cutting you to pieces later. Just come out now and I'll only slice you up a little bit. DEZZZZZZZZY!'
Dezzy looked through the keyhole as he saw Patrick repeatedly band his head against his door.
Patrick: Don't hide away like a victim! Your the villain here! You've had this coming for so long. Every put down, every time you mocked me..... YOU MADE ME FEEL LIKE SHIT and now I'm gonna make you feel like mince meat....

Dezzy had had enough, he looked into his dad's closet and find his cricket bat. This was going to stop right now. Without warning Dezzy burst out from his parents room and hit a surprised Patrick in the head with the bat.. He hit the wall and slid down.
Dezzy: I have treated you like crap and YOU WONDER WHY! LOOK AT THIS!
He pointed to his cheek.
Dezzy: You're a fucking Looney Toon!
Patrick tried to get up but Dezzy hit him again to the ribs and Patrick fell to the floor. Breathing a sigh of relief Dezzy ran to the stairs but felt his heart stop as Patrick's hand pushed him. Dezzy banged into the wall, he lost his balance and tumbled down the stairs.

Dezzy: Urgh....
His vision went blurry and he felt an incredible pain across his leg. He tried to move but he felt a foot upon his chest.
Patrick: Tut Tut Tut, Look what you done. Is your foot meant to bend that way? Let's see what I can do about it...
Dezzy vision began to sharpen when he felt the worst pain he had ever felt. He looked up between his own screams to see Patrick stamping on his now-broken ankle. He thought he was going to pass out when he felt a pain twice as worse. It seemed like Patrick had gotten hold of his knife and was going to town on Dezzy's leg.

Dezzy stumbled away and Patrick laughed that dark laugh. He raised his knife to strike the final blow but Dezzy swept his legs from underneath him. Patrick hit his head on the floor and Dezzy amazingly managed to get back onto his feet. He was running on pure adrenaline and anger. He picked up Patrick's knife and threw it away. He then grabbed Patrick and span him round before throwing him into a cabinet. It fell on top of him and knocked him out cold. It really was over this time.

Dezzy stumbled to the front door when a feeling of utter dread filled every fibre of his being....He realised he had thrown Patrick into his father's gun cabinet. He looked down to see Patrick's hand reaching for a pistol. Dezzy stumbled to the back door and tried to unlock it.

Patrick: Dezzy! Dezzy!
He sang out. He had managed to get the cabinet of himself and grab a pistol but luckily for Dezzy the impact from the cabinet dazed him like Dezzy had been earlier and he couldn't see him clearly. Knowing that he had a gun Dezzy hid in an alcove of the Kitchen in order to ambush Patrick when he came looking. As Patrick dizzily walked into the kitchen Dezzy leapt at him and grabbed his hand that had the gun. They struggled, although Dazed Patrick was stronger then him and was throwing Dezzy about trying to make him let go but Dezzy was managing to hold on.

Dezzy head-butted Patrick and managed to yank the gun away from him but he was a little too exuberant and the gun slipped from his hand and hit the back door. Both Patrick and Dezzy looked at each other briefly before they leapt towards the weapon....

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Shaun had arrived at Dezzy's house and heard the commotion inside. She grabbed Jack's card and began to type it into her phone as she ran up to the house but as she reached the door a terrible sound echoed through the house and into the street.

BANG

Shaun froze in shock, she could hear Jack's voice on the other end but she couldn't answer. The house was silent now, the fight had ended. 'What the hell happened' Shaun thought before thinking another thought.

'Who got shot?'

Tom4784 16-04-2010 08:39 PM

This one was insanely creepy to write since I'm alone looking after the dogs tonight *watches out for psychotic Irish teens in the cupboards*.

I hope you enjoy it and the next part will be up next monday I think.

LemonJam 16-04-2010 08:45 PM

ah\

Loveit.

Twilight 16-04-2010 08:58 PM

That was amazing, actually can't wait for the next episode:D

Patrick 16-04-2010 09:01 PM

BEST Episode Ever.

Oh my god, I think our characters are legends.
This is brilliant, your really creative.

I cannot wait until the next episode :p

I reckon I got shot though and i'll die, Dezzy you could use this as a chance to put a poll up saying 'Who got shot' and people can predict who it was.

Like a 'Whodunnit' thing, you know?

Would be intresting.
Anyway, great episode.

Patrick 16-04-2010 09:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dezzy (Post 3168859)
This one was insanely creepy to write since I'm alone looking after the dogs tonight *watches out for psychotic Irish teens in the cupboards*.

I hope you enjoy it and the next part will be up next monday I think.

:joker:

lily. 16-04-2010 10:23 PM

Remy: Sacre Bleu! I haven't seen that many flashing lights since since I gave up ze Ketamine!

Gary: What's the plan then Mom? Are you gonna stay together and raise that baby with Daddy Dead Legs over there?

He realised he had thrown Patrick into his father's gun cabinet.



Those lines made me LOL..


Great writing Dezzy.. Gary says I'm sucha slutty mom... sob/

Tom4784 17-04-2010 12:05 AM

Thanks Guys! :thumbs:

Interesting idea Patrick, I might consider it.

Rofl Linda, yes you are /sad. I was so tempted to make Remy a full time character after a wrote the restuarant bit, he was fun to write. Maybe in a potential Season 2....If I can think of storylines ridiculous enough to top this one. :laugh:

Tom4784 19-04-2010 09:09 PM

Episode 7
Doin' Dallas


Shaun waited outside with baited breath as she saw the police and the paramedics go into Dezzy's house. It had only been a minutes since the gunshot rang out but Jack managed to pull strings in order to get help quickly. There was shouting in the house but Shaun couldn't tell who the voices belonged to. 'Let Dezzy be safe, let him be safe' she kept saying in her head, she felt responsible for this she had seen that picture before and if she could have made the connection sooner then she could have prevented this. She snapped out of her thoughts when she saw the police drag someone from the house.

It was Patrick and he wasn't injured badly....that meant.....

Shaun: Oh god no....
Dezzy was brought out on a stretcher a few seconds later, Shaun ran up to the paramedics but she was held back by Jack.
Jack: Listen he's alive but only just, nobody's allowed to go in the Ambulance with him so I'll take you to the hospital. Try and contact his parents, I hear they're on a business trip but they need to be notified....I just hope they get back in time...
Shaun's heart dropped at that last sentence but she proceeded to phone Dezzy's Parents and then their friends.

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Mark: Stay here as long as you like.
Mark had just set up the spare room for Gary, she didn't know the reason why Gary had argued with her mother but she wasn't going to turn away a friend in need.
Gary: Thanks
Gary felt tired and numb, she replayed the night's events in her head and she just couldn't believe it. Lili and Zee? This kind of thing happened in TV shows but not in real life. She then remembered the fact that Lili was pregnant and grimaced. What a mess.

After driving around for a while she decided that she was going to stick to what she said to Lili and Zee, if they wanted to carry on then Gary would tell Wombai and everyone else. It was cruel but Gary didn't care, they were living in a pipe dream if they thought they could raise that baby together. After that she ended up on Mark's doorstep.
Mark: Listen, I'm gonna go in the bath but if you need anything don't hesitate to ask Mom and Dad okay?
Gary nodded and mark gave out a comforting smile before leaving. As she left Gary heard something drop onto the floor. She looked down to see Mark's Anti-Depressants, she was about to call out for Mark when she decided not to. She approached the the bottle of pills and pocketed them. She didn't know why she did it but she felt lighter for doing it, she felt more energized then she had since she found out about....them.

A few minutes passed when she heard Mark's phone ring, she walked into her bedroom and picked it up.
Shaun: Mark?
Gary: No it's Gary, Mark's in the bath.
Shaun: Listen something bad's happened.
Shaun told Gary what had happened, she grabbed her coat and keys and called to Mark.
Gary: Mark we need to get to the hospital now!

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Nathan:...and then he said 'That's not the Elephant Man that's my wife!'
GypsyGoth roared with laughter at Nathan's joke while Lemonjam and Jen politely laughed, Nathan didn't pick up on that however. The evening was going well albeit awkward. GypsyGoth and Nathan made the most of the impromptu double date but Jen and Jam had remained quiet. They were both playing a game now, before today neither knew that the other cared about them but neither wanted to admit it.

Although Lemonjam had originally decided not to take things further with Jen, he questioned his decision when he saw her with Nathan. He was surprised at how jealous he felt, he decided then to return the favor, it would be cruel for him to pursue her but if she made the first move then that would be fine.

LJ knew it was a warped way of thinking but he had strong feelings for Jen and he couldn't go without seeing what might have been. Like Jen with Nathan he felt bad for using Gypsygoth but then again it seemed that they were having a good time regardless. Lemonjam's phone rang loudly.
Lemonjam: Sorry about this.
He said as he answered the phone.
Lemonjam: Hey Shaun what's going on?
LemonJam: Oh my god, I'll be right there.
He shut his phone and stood up.
Lemonjam: I'm sorry Gypsygoth but I've got to go. Nathan do you think you can take her home for me?
Nathan: Sure, don't worry about it.
Jen: What's Happened?
Lemonjam: Dezzy's been shot, They're taking him to hospital right now.
Jen couldn't believe it.
Jen: I'm coming with you, I'm sorry Nathan-
Nathan: I understand completely, go! I'll take care of things here.
Jen: Thanks.
He really was a great guy, it was just a shame Jen's heart belonged to another.

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Everyone arrived at the hospital at near enough the same time although Gary and Mark were last to arrive. As they met at the entrance Gary was dismayed to see Zee there. He looked as though he wanted to say something but she just gave him the biggest death stare she could muster. She couldn't and wouldn't deal with him, not now.
Jack: Go on ahead, I'll see what's going on with Patrick, you won't be able to see Dezzy for a while but you'll be able to find out what's going on.

They walked up to the front desk and asked about Dezzy but he had only just been admitted so they didn't have any information to give. Shaun saw a doctor come out of a nearby ward and decided to give it a shot to see if he knew anything.

Doctor: The name ring's a definite bell.
He said upon Shaun's inquiry.
Doctor: Oh.... I remember now.
He looked at them all with heavy eyes
Doctor: There's no easy way of saying this but your friend was declared dead on arrival.

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A day had passed since they found out about Dezzy, Jen still couldn't believe it. Dezzy was quiet and kind she couldn't see why any of this had happened. Although she thought about Dezzy her mind wandered to Lemonjam often. This whole experience had made her realise that she shouldn't waste time. She knew who she felt about him and she basically knew how he felt about her. Why play games?

As soon as she found him in the school courtyards she dragged him to a spare classroom. He looked confused and slightly worried.
Jen: Listen, yesterday made me think about about a lot of things. I....I'm not sure how to say this but I really li-
Lemonjam: Hang on.
He knew what she was going to say and like her he had done a lot of thinking. He spent last night thinking about Jen and the letter he had received, it would have been wrong and cruel to start something with Jen now. He had waited too long and now it was too late.

LemonJam: I know what you're gonna say and I feel the same way but this can't happen. I'm not good enough for you Jen, stick with Nathan. He's a good guy, he'll treat you right.
Jen: But I want you.
Lemonjam: It just can't happen, I'm sorry.

He ran for the door and left Jen alone. She was confused, if he felt the same way then why was he pulling away? There was something going on and she decided to find out what.

She wasn't going to let Lemonjam go that easily.

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Night had fallen on the T.C but Shaun didn't notice. She had been in bed all day thinking about things, she still felt guilt over Dezzy but the incident also made her think about Jack and what had happened with Russia. She decided that she couldn't bury her past for much longer and looked around her room for his card. She found it in her handbag and dialed his number.

Jack: Hello? This is Agent Jack Tower-
Shaun: Listen it's me Shaun.
Jack: Oh, how are you holding up? Yesterday must have been quite tough.
Shaun: I'm.....I'm unsure really. I think I'm feeling a bit numb.
Jack: That's to be expected, Yesterday was an ordeal.
Shaun: Anyway, I've been thinking about things and I going to tell you everything....About what happened in Russia.
Jack: Are you sure?
Shaun: Yes, it's the least I could do. You did everything you could to save Dezzy, if it wasn't for you he'd have died at the house.
Jack: I was just doing my duty, listen I'm going to go away for a few days to oversee the proceeding's around....Patrick. I'll talk to you when I get back.
Shaun: okay, you make sure that bastard fries. Dezzy would still be here if it wasn't for him.
Jack: what?.......Dezzy's..........you........know? Hello?
Jack began to break up.
Shaun: Hello?
The line went dead, Jack must have lost signal. Shaun was incredibly tired, she put down her phone and went to sleep.

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When Shaun it was late morning, she checked her phone and got up. She decided that she was going to try to make it to school today, there wasn't any point in moping around the house. As she went grab some clothes she heard someone turn on the showers. She checked the time again, it couldn't be Sticks as he works 9-5 and it sounded like it came from the guest bathroom. She walked out in the hallway and knocked on the bathroom door but no one answered, she realised that they forgot to lock the door and against her better judgment she walked inside. Her mouth dropped open in shock when she say who it was.

She almost fainted, was her eyes playing tricks on her? This couldn't be real couldn't it?

Dezzy: Oh hey, Good morning! Erm...Do you think you could pass me a towel?

Tom4784 19-04-2010 09:10 PM

The Next part will be up Wednesday/Thursday I think. I wasn't much of a fan of this episode but the next one's gonna be a good one to write I think.

lily. 19-04-2010 10:04 PM

Dezzy comes back from the dead.. nice touch.. ;)


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