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Tom4784 06-04-2010 11:35 PM

The T.C (Episode 8 up)
 

It's a new story I'm doing, It's gonna take the piss outta teen dramas. the first part will be up soon if anyone's interested. There's gonna be a lot more people in it then shown in the trailer it's just that i got bored of trying to find clips.

GypsyGoth 06-04-2010 11:39 PM

:love:

Jessica. 06-04-2010 11:43 PM

ahahhaha Patrick!

Stephanie 06-04-2010 11:45 PM

pmsl! sounds like it's gonna be good.

MrGaryy 06-04-2010 11:46 PM

outstanding.

Tom4784 06-04-2010 11:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GypsyGoth (Post 3143608)
:love:

:hug:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jessica.. (Post 3143626)
ahahhaha Patrick!

That fall hurt y'know :sad:

Jessica. 06-04-2010 11:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dezzy (Post 3143640)
That fall hurt y'know :sad:

Aww :(

Very good btw

Shaun 06-04-2010 11:49 PM

hot

Tom4784 06-04-2010 11:50 PM

Thanks for the comments, the first part should be up tommorow I think.

Z 07-04-2010 12:04 AM

PMSL Dean I love it. I'm so hot :love:

lily. 07-04-2010 05:29 PM

Wombai & Stu !!!!! EPIC CASTING!

I love me.. I'm hot! :) One thing though, am I Gary's mother? LoL

MrGaryy 07-04-2010 05:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by lili (Post 3144501)
Wombai & Stu !!!!! EPIC CASTING!

I love me.. I'm hot! :) One thing though, am I Gary's mother? LoL

yeah, we're fierce together.

lily. 07-04-2010 05:41 PM

We are son.. I taught you well..

-beams with pride-

Tom4784 07-04-2010 08:22 PM

Episode 1
Secrets


Lili: GARY MARISSA CHRISTINA COOPER GET YOUR ASS DOWN HERE!

Gary grimaced, her head was still pounding from the night before and she could not handle her mother when she was destroying the decibel scale. She put on a dressing gown and walked downstairs. She walked into the kitchen to see her mother, Lili with her arms crossed looking stern. She stood next to Marissa's now-open bag and in that instant Gary knew why Lili was so mad. Lili pulled out a vodka bottle from the bag.

Lili: WHAT THE HELL IS THIS?! (tyra/)
Gary: It's Vodka mother.
Lili: I was being rhetorical! Look it up! You know the rules in this house Gary! No spirits before Noon! We're strictly a Champagne family!

With that Lili's stern face softened as she pulled out a bottle of Champagne and poured them both a glass with their breakfast. Lili was not a normal mother and she was glad of it, because of her easy going nature they had a great relationship. Lili was incredibly proud of her daughter, she had spent years teaching Gary the art of ferocity and Gary was a natural at it. They ate their breakfast and Gary went upstairs to get changed for school, Lili watched her walk up the stairs until she was out of earshot and quickly rang a number on her phone.

Lili: She's leaving for school soon, get ready because I really need you.

Gary wandered back into the kitchen a few minutes later to grab her bag and say goodbye to Lili.

Lili: Bye dear and remember if a stranger offers you a ride only go with him if he's cute, rich and hung!

They cackled at Lili's old line as Gary left for school. Lili again watched her walk away before returning to her phone.

Lili: She's gone, get here as quickly as you can because we haven't got much time, you've got Double Maths in an hour.

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Shaun and Jen were waiting on the steps of Tibb County High waiting for their friends. They always sat in this spot as it offered them a prime view of the football team during morning practice. Shaun was staring at Andy, he was the captain of the football team and the object of her affections. Jen however was not, she only had eyes for one boy and he was approaching them.

LemonJam: Hey, I take it nobody's here yet then.

Jen shook her head shyly and smiled as he sat next to her. She was deeply in love with him and had been for years but he never saw it, He saw her as a friend. There was an awkward silence between them as Shaun listened to her ipod.

Shaun: Ke$ha? Nyet! ****!
Jen: What?

Shaun had slipped up, She panicked for a moment.

Shaun: Ooooh Bob Dylan!
Jen: Qt.

They shared the earphones leaving Lemonjam alone. He looked around and spotted Dezzy rushing around, Dezzy was the Editor of the school newspaper.

Lemonjam: Hey what's up?
Dezzy: I'm looking for Patrick, He was doing a piece on....N-Dubz (He grimaced at the mention of them) and the deadline's soon and I can't find him anywhere.
Lemonjam: I think I saw him in the courtyard earlier.
Dezzy: Thanks man.

Dezzy sped off towards the courtyard. He was no fan of Patrick and they rarely saw eye to eye but he needed more reporters and he had no choice but to let him take part when Patrick applied. He was a quiet individual and was eternally creepy, he unnerved Dezzy. He liked his privacy and Dezzy had no problem with that usually but it was a pain in times like this when Dezzy needed to find him. The Courtyard was almost abandoned as usual save for Patrick who strangely had a jar of Butterflies with him. He was mumbling something but Dezzy was too far away to hear anything so he crept closer and realised what Patrick was doing. He was grabbing the butterflies from the jar and ripping their wings off.

Patrick: Catch 'em Kill 'em.......

Dezzy backed away before this scene became a bad Amityville parody.

Patrick:....Dezzy?
Dezzy froze and span around awkwardly.
Dezzy: Hey Patrick!
He said it a little to enthusiastically.
Patrick: How long have you been standing there?
He said it with a dark edge.
Dezzy: Not long at all, if you can get that article to me before the end of the first period that'd be great!
He smiled a fake smile before hurrying off, That was one of the creepiest things he had ever seen and that included Tom Shattock's Facebook page.

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Stu's class was about to begin, he was a Biology teacher that specialised in Botany. The bell rang and LemonJam entered the room pushing the wheelchair-bound Zee. He smiled weakly at them and the rest of the class as they piled in. He looked out into the Corridor and saw Wombai the Politics Teacher, She gave him a look of pure hatred before walking on. He looked down at his lesson plan and felt the immense guilt once again.

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Apart from the courtyard encounter, the day had passed with little else happening but Dezzy was glad to be on the way home. His mind had been replaying that scene with Patrick all day, it had creeped him out immensely but the conversation afterwards scared him. What was wrong with Patrick? He pulled into his drive and parked his car, he grabbed the house keys and proceeded to his front door. As he stepped onto his front door step he felt something crunch beneath him. He looked down to see that someone had left a pile of dead Butterflies on his step.

Tom4784 07-04-2010 08:24 PM

It's a bit messy but the next part will be better since it's gonna be a bit more focused. Hope you enjoyed it anyway.

MrGaryy 07-04-2010 08:45 PM

me and Linda = hot.

Tom4784 07-04-2010 08:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by MrGaryy (Post 3144865)
me and Linda = hot.

Linda's my favourite character to write so far.

Jen 07-04-2010 08:52 PM

I love this. <3

LemonJam 07-04-2010 08:53 PM

ROFL Oh that's fly.

Tom4784 07-04-2010 08:54 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jen (Post 3144884)
I love this. <3

Quote:

Originally Posted by LemonJam (Post 3144890)
ROFL Oh that's fly.

/happy.

lily. 07-04-2010 08:59 PM

I love this!

And, what's this secret phone call about? Am I having an affair???? How Gabrielle Solis of me..

Tom4784 07-04-2010 09:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by lili (Post 3144904)
I love this!

And, what's this secret phone call about? Am I having an affair???? How Gabrielle Solis of me..

Yup, I decided to keep it true to life so you're a cradle snatcher. :laugh:

\PJ/ 07-04-2010 09:12 PM

Good stuff dezzy :)

lily. 07-04-2010 09:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dezzy (Post 3144915)
Yup, I decided to keep it true to life so you're a cradle snatcher. :laugh:


Cheeky arse! I'll have you know my o/h is actually 3 yrs older than me. :)

Firewire 07-04-2010 09:25 PM

fierce

CaraRawr 08-04-2010 05:37 PM

sf amazing.

Shaun 08-04-2010 06:09 PM

Jen let's share headphones <3

Jessica. 08-04-2010 06:16 PM

Hmm what's with all the msn lately. *pretends to be on msn*

ahh/ That is brilliant!
I wish I was in it though! holly1 tyra/

Tom4784 08-04-2010 10:01 PM

Episode 2
Ana-Shaun-ia


Setanta: Now Class we have a new student starting today, His name's Jack. Be nice.
Jack: Hi!
He waved to an uncaring class. He scanned the room quickly until his eyes rested on Shaun. He stared a moment too long and she raised her gaze and spotted him, He carried on staring intently at her and it was creeping her out. He looked away and sat at a desk at the back of the class, The lesson resumed as normal but Shaun felt Jack stare at her all lesson. When the Bell rang she was relieved to get away from him, hopefully that would be the only lesson they shared.

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Stu had just finished a lesson when Wombai knocked on his classroom door.

Stu: Hey, come in.
He said awkwardly. She stepped in and scanned the room, her lips were pursed with fury. It was taking every bit of her self control to stand in the same room as Stu without screaming at him or worse
Wombai: I've come for the progress reports on the Year 8's.
She said coldly, they avoided each other's gaze as her searched for the reports. A few moments passed before he found what she wanted and with the reports found she swiftly made for the door.

Stu: Listen Wombai.....I-
Wombai: Don't
Stu: But I-
Wombai: Leave it.
Stu: I'm-
Wombai: I SAID SHUT IT! (Sue/)
Stu: I'm Sorry!
Wombai: That doesn't cut it! Nothing you do or say will ever make it okay! I trusted you, I LOVED YOU! But that's all gone now, ever since that day.....Just leave me alone.
She walked out the classroom, leaving Stu in silence.

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Shaun was sat on the steps with Gary and Mark, Shaun's mind was pre-occupied with that new kid Jack. It felt like everywhere she looked he was there, What was his problem? He was like 30Stone with an underaged member and it unnerved her. As Gary and Mark argued over which Britney track was the most fierce, Shaun noticed that Jack was staring at her again. She felt nervous briefly before succumbing to fury, who the hell does he think he is? She stood up and strode over to him.

Shaun: OMG what is your problem? Are you like, obsessed with me?
Jack laughed a little before replying.
Jack: A little bit.
Shaun: Just leave me alone!
She turned away to return to her friends but Jack grabbed her arm and pulled her back.
Jack: I'm onto you. I know 'Shaun'....I know.
She stared at him in shock before regaining her ferocity.
Shaun: Bitch Please! Touch me again and I'll take you to the carpet.
She pulled her arm away from him and strutted away. She winked at Andy who smiled back and returned to her friends. Their argument was over and they had decided that all Twilight Twitty's tracks sh*t all over Britney's any day of the week.

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It was Shaun's last lesson of the day, Biology with Mr Stu. She was lucky enough to avoid Jack since their encounter and it seemed that the only class they had together was Setanta's which was a relief to Shaun. Stu was talking about the formation of Penicillin but Shaun wasn't listening which was unfortunate as Stu announced a new class project that would divide them up into pairs. By the time she snapped out of her trance the only partner left was Patrick. Shaun TANISHA'd before beginning work with him. He was a quiet partner who got on with his work without fuss which Shaun didn't mind. She didn't really want to socialise with him, he was a bit of a freak. As they both wrote up their preliminary Hypotheses Shaun noticed that Patrick had a class photo poking out of his notepad. Under the guise of checking her work against a Textbook she leaned in closer to take a sneaky look and she immediately wished she hadn't. It was a picture of his form class and from what she could tell all but Patrick's face had been scribbled out but one face had been cut out all together. She shivered before deciding to carry on with her work. She already had enough troubles without getting involved with Patrick's.

The bell rang signaling the end of the school day which could not come sooner for for Shaun. Today had been stressful and she just wanted to go home and forget about everything for a while. What she didn't expect to find was a man sitting on her car.

Shaun: Erm, excuse me but what the hell? Get off my car!
The man turned around and Shaun's mouth dropped open in shock. It couldn't be.....he was dead and Shaun didn't believe in ghosts.
??????: That's no way to greet an old friend.
Shaun: You.....
??????: Mother Russia never forgets, Natalya

Tom4784 08-04-2010 10:02 PM

Thanks for your comments guys. The next part will be up in a few days.

Raph 08-04-2010 10:06 PM

fantastic! :D

Tom4784 08-04-2010 10:23 PM

Thanks Samy :bigsmile:

LemonJam 08-04-2010 11:20 PM

i love. <3

Tom4784 08-04-2010 11:25 PM

:dance:

Thanks James.

Billy 08-04-2010 11:25 PM

Amaaaazing.

MrGaryy 08-04-2010 11:26 PM

rofl this is getting better!

Twilight 09-04-2010 01:08 AM

I love this <3

Patrick 09-04-2010 01:44 AM

I cant belive I didnt click on this thread before, I thought it was some American Reality Show and wanted to avoid it but OMG.
Its brilliant Dezzy!

I loved my obsession with killing Butterflies in Episode 1 and drawing over faces in Episode 2.


Cant wait for Episode 3!

Well done tbh.

Tom4784 09-04-2010 02:27 AM

Thanks guys, I'm glad you're enjoying it. I've had a burst of creativity so I think I might have the next part done later today.

Patrick 09-04-2010 02:32 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dezzy (Post 3149190)
Thanks guys, I'm glad you're enjoying it. I've had a burst of creativity so I think I might have the next part done later today.

Good to hear :thumbs:


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