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Old 10-02-2009, 06:25 PM #13
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I think there are some points where you're trying to make lines rhyme and as a result you're left with lyrics that make little sense (for example: "She's flirtatious and dirty/ Has kinky ideas as if she's thirty.")

I quite like the anger behind some of the lyrics though, so keep up ze good verk.
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