Thank you Magic.
The next judgement comes from Satisfaction. He is currently offline, but he provided me with his opinions before he signed off.
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Outside Of The Box -
I really like the concept of it. The images really helped convey the story and the way that it was written, almost like a log, was extremely effective. I also liked how Part One dealt with the problem, and Part Two showed how it had been resolved after a week. The way it was written was clever, I liked how it was all speech from the patient though more narration of what they were doing could've been a nice addition. I feel each person could have been elaborated on, perhaps dig a bit deeper, although I understand there was a word limit. Overall, I felt the story flowed well, it was easy to follow and it was different, and therefore enjoyable.
If U Seek Britney -
Interesting wordplay on the title. At first glance, it's not easy on the eyes. I think you could've spaced out the paragraphs to make that easier. As for the story, I think it was pretty good, certainly imaginative. It was a very fast-paced story, I don't know whether that was intended but it got a bit confusing as to what was happening at times and some parts could have done with more detail as it did move on very quickly. The interactivity element was a great idea though, and it was well written, I could see it published.
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