[Lauren]

It's really good, but if you're a writer you can accept constructive criticism.
At the moment it sounds like you're simply writing what goes through your head at the time, which isn't what a story should be - it should be well constructed.

The part imparticular was "Her motto was a smile a day keeps all evil away,anyway Edna had" It's as if you're saying "OKay, I'm rambling now, so I'll just say 'anyway' then cary on with the story".

Also, as it stands the first paragraph sounds as if you're simply listing her activities without adding any description to it, or any adjectives.
For example instead of saying:
"She looked at the clock and it was 5:00; the time Edna walked her dog Milo,so she put on her black tweed coat and went with Milo out the door."

You COULD say:

"She looked at the clock anticipatingly, noting that it was 5pm she roused from her chair, setting aside the cupcakes and calling for her dog Milo - it was time for the evening walk. Edna carefully adourned her black coat and made for the door quickly, preparing herself for the brisk cold that will face her".

Just some general constructive criticism but otherwise it's good, sounds interesting.