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Old 18-01-2010, 07:12 PM #1
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lmfao, that fight is epic. very creative and funny <3
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Chapter 7.2

Niamh and Kaz had been traipsing through the forest for a while, and began to wonder if they were going to find anyone.

“We’re going to have to start heading back now, or we’ll be late.” Niamh checked her watch.

“I don’t understand it, you’d think we’d have found someone by now...” Kaz dropped an obvious hint that they were about to get into a fight.

“Stop right there!” An authoritative voice commanded the two women. They complied, without trying to see who had told them to stop.

“Ooer Lauren, you’re such a dominatrix lool!”

“Shut up, Sam. Who are you?” Lauren demanded.

“We are Niamhxo and Kaz from TiBB, we’re here to stop the fighting.” Niamh spoke calmly and clearly.

“I don’t believe you.” Lauren barked back at them.

“What don’t you believe?” Kaz asked calmly.

“That you’re here to stop this. I don’t know what you’re doing here, you weren’t on the picture, but you’re here now and I can’t trust you.” Lauren stepped out of the shadows, pointing a gun at the two women.

“Lauren, where did you get a gun? Ooer.” Sam followed Lauren, sounding nervous.

“Shut up, Sam. You’re lying to me, what are you really doing here?” Lauren was beginning to lose it; all three of them could see it, she was shaking and her voice was becoming strained, as if she was going to cry.

“We’re here to help, Lauren, you can be one of us again...” Kaz offered Lauren a smile, but this enraged Lauren.

“No! You don’t get it, do you? I don’t want to be a part of this. I shouldn’t be here! I left the forum, I quit my moderator job, yet I’m here! This is messed up, what the hell am I doing here? You people are sick, you’re animals! I’m not falling for any of your mind games, just be honest with me, what are you doing here?!”

“Lauren, we’re here to end all of this!” Niamh pleaded with her, but Lauren got even angrier and fired a warning shot in the air, raising a shriek out of Niamh, Kaz and Sam.

“Lauren, they’re not going to hurt us, stop pointing the gun at them!” Sam tried to grab Lauren’s arm, but she pushed Sam away and shot him. She gasped; he gasped; and then he fell forwards, face first into the ground.

“I didn’t mean to do that...” Lauren began to wail uncontrollably, and Kaz motioned forward to try and give her a hug, but Lauren panicked and fired a shot at Kaz, too. Kaz sunk to her knees, and fell onto her side, gasping for breath hopelessly.

“Oh ****! Oh ****!” Niamh was crying, and Lauren stared at Kaz’s dying body in horror.

“Right now she’ll be blacking out, you know?” Lauren began to speak, to someone who wasn’t there. “Why did I do that? Oh no...”

“Lauren?” Niamh whispered, not wanting to provoke her. “Lauren, put the gun down... please? Nobody’s trying to hurt you, please just don’t hold that gun...”

“She’ll be delirious now, she won’t know what’s going on, and any second now she’s going to see the light, although I don’t think that really happens... I guess that’ll be the last piece of knowledge I ever pick up.” Lauren began to smile despite her tears, and she rocked back and forth on her knees, ever so gently.

“Lauren? Lauren can you hear me? Put the gun down, Lauren. Please? Lauren, please?” Niamh suddenly let out a scream, as Lauren suddenly stared at her.

“You saw all of this. I don’t know what you’re doing here, but I can’t let you live to tell other people.” Lauren had, just like this story, lost the plot. Or did this story ever really have a plot to begin with? Hey look, a pair of scissors with wings just had sex with Christina Applegate on the back of that Heidi Montag shaped piñata! Cool!

“No! Don’t!” Niamh shut her eyes tightly and began to scream as loudly as she possibly could, but it was no use.

“I’m sorry Niamh.” Lauren fired. She took a step back, and observed the three dead bodies around her. She wiped her tears away, slipped the gun into her pocket and started walking away from the scene; in the direction of three caged TiBB members...
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I'll hopefully have 7.3 written tonight; and after that just one more chapter to go! :O
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Rofl at the fight scene. How dramatic was that last one
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Chapter 7.2 and a half

Shaun and Darenn had spent several months waiting for me to let them move around in the story; so in the interim they had started dating and Shaun was 2 months pregnant with his and Darenn's baby: MrGaryy. The duo trekked around the island looking for stuff to do, but because they're both crap at orienteering, they gave up and settled down in a small clearing in the middle of some bushes. Shaun and Darenn had a rollercoaster of a relationship in the relatively short time they were together; one morning Darenn had really bad diarrhoea, like seriously bad, and Shaun threw him out for a whole two days before taking him back because he was throwing up everywhere due to morning sickness and realised he was just as bad as Darenn for disgusting bodily eruptions. I'm disgusting.

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Chapter 7.3

Shaun screeched at Darenn in a furious rage. Darenn sighed, having come to accept that Shaun, despite being the motherfather to his baby, would never be the one. They had had a bad break up, but they had remained in contact due to Shaun’s pregnancy. And the fact that they still lived on the same patch of clearing on the remote island where forum members were killing each other for the admin’s sick jollies. Darenn was used to all the abuse he got from Shaun, but this time it was different somehow. It took Darenn a moment or two to realise it; but he was feeling alert and on edge; as if somebody was watching him. He shushed Shaun (shockingly shutting Shaun’s shmoocher. Sh.) and crawled into the shadows, ushering his former lover to do likewise. Shaun stubbornly refused to do what Darenn told him to do: he was a strong, independent woman who could achieve anything on his/her own. Shaun immediately regretted his/her decision.

“I.. I don’t believe it.. I..” Shaun stuttered, feeling completely numb.

“Hello Shaun.” Admin Mark tried to smile at him through watery eyes, but ended up looking like he was grimacing.

“What are you doing here? Have you come to kill me?” Shaun did not feel afraid, just numbed by the overwhelming rush of different emotions.

“No. I’m here to put an end to all of this. To right my wrongs. I’m here to rescue you.” Mark stated boldly.

Darenn, meanwhile, had crawled through the bushes as quietly as he could, and was nearly out on the other side [/unintentional gay joke]. He scrambled through a convenient crawl space, and as he stood up, came face to face with Princess. Darenn’s survivor instinct took over, and he punched Princess in the stomach before she could utter a word. Darenn tried to push past her and run away from her, but she grabbed him by the shoulder to stop him. Darenn misinterpreted her intentions; and due to being punched, she could not speak – so he kicked her in the shins, causing her legs to buckle, and Darenn ran away as fast as he could.

“What do you mean, rescue me? After all of this, you’re just going to call it a day? Innocent people have died here! I’m a mass murderer!” Shaun suddenly felt tears rolling down his face.

“I’m so sorry for all of that Shaun, I don’t know how to even begin to explain how sorry I am, and I know that means absolutely nothing to you, to any of you. But I want you to know that I do feel remorse, and I will feel it for the rest of my life, however long that may be. I’m here with Princess... Laura! Laura, come in, it’s safe!” Mark shouted for his new boss.

Laura stumbled into the clearing, gasping for air.

“Darenn... he ran away, before I could tell him he was saved...” Laura wheezed.

“Oh God! We have to get him back now!” Shaun s0bbed. “He’s my unborn child’s father!”

“We will get him back, Shaun, but we can’t risk any more innocent forum members’ lives; we have to escort you off the island first, then we’ll go looking for him.” Laura’s voice was firm.

“Please! You can’t do this to me! You have to get him back! If you don’t let me go after him right now, he will die! Do you know who’s writing this story?!” Shaun screamed, and sunk to his knees, weakly pounding his fists against Mark’s chest. That sounds vaguely sexual, it’s not meant to be. Oops.

“Nah. Let’s bail.” Laura took one arm, Mark took the other, and together they dragged the pregnant Shaun to his feet. The three of them marched away in the direction of TiBB Towers; to the beat of Shaun’s steady crying and pleas to go after Darenn.

Lauren had been walking for what felt like months (again, I’m so very sorry for the wait) in a trance; she talked to her split personality: Marcjswp Fierce, in some kind of weird defence mechanism.

“You look oh so pretty today Marcy Marc, I’m going to put a ring on you.” Lauren chattered away to herself, before suddenly stopping. She snapped out of her trance to an extent, and realised she was staring at three cages, containing Twilight, Andy and Stu. It wasn’t a pretty sight.

“You’re Such a Mess, you Are Emo You Freak.” Andy squabbled with Twilight.

“Fail.” Emily shouted back, she stuck her fingers in her ears and shouted ‘la la la’ over and over.

“Oh please Andy, go listen to some real music and then you can dish out insults.” Stu laughed. “And as for you, Twilight, what’s with your new album? Experimental my ass; you plagiarised the hook of Sweeter Than Splenda from Depeche Mode!”

“Tbh you’re a fail.” Twilight 2baha/ed Stu.

Lauren observed the scene with a glazed over look; in her head she could visualise a word in gigantic, red writing, right before her eyes. She could hear the word loudly in her ears, and she could almost taste it on her tongue. Kill. These people had to die. It was the only way she could save herself. Lauren stepped into view, immediately silencing the arguing trio.

“Lauren?” Stu asked fearfully. “Lauren, it’s over. We’re saved! We’re just waiting for James to get back.”

“Stu... Stu! She’s got a gun! Stu, she’s got a ****ing gun!!” Andy scrambled backwards in his cage, trying to get away from the psychotic Faheybulous one.

“It’s only a beretta though, fail tbh.” Twilight smirked.

Lauren responded to Twilight’s insult with a bullet; killing the pop diva instantly.

“Oh ****! Oh ****!” Andy’s frantic cries of anguish turned into high pitched shrieks of fear.

“I’m gonna need a hell of a lot of weed if I’m ever gonna be ready for this... aw, piss.” Stu fumbled around in his pockets but realised he had nothing on him. My story, my rules BYAAAATCH! Aw now I feel bad, have a last smoke before your death Stu!

“Jesus Christ she’s gonna do it! HELP! HELP!” Andy hollered loudly, and his prayers were answered in the form of Darenn. Darenn heard the cries for help, and started running as fast as he could towards the shouts.

“Greg, can I have a lighter? Ta.” A cheap BIC appeared in front of Stu, and he lit his last spliff. “Jesus, this stuff is crap qualit-”

Lauren fired at Stu, hitting him square in the chest. He began to slowly bleed out. And that’s what you get when you complain about the quality of imaginary drugs in this nonsensical story, Stu. GOD.

“HELP!” Andy rattled the bars of his cage. “**** IT! JUST ****ING DO IT YOU CRAZY BITCH! SHOOT ME! I’LL TAKE ONE FOR THE TEA- no, not like that.” Andy shooed away the crowd of gays who suddenly appeared by his cage.

“Not on my watch!” Darenn made everyone cringe, and then ran towards Lauren. She turned her gun away from Andy, looked at Darenn and raised the gun.

“AAAAAHHHHHHHH!” Darenn bellowed a cry of anger and fear, and crashed into Lauren as the gun went off.

“Oh God!” Andy shut his eyes tight, not wanting to spoil the outcome of Darenn’s charge towards Lauren.

Darenn was covered in blood. He felt faint and dizzy, and wondered if this is what it felt like to die. Then he began to realise that he felt no pain. He opened his eyes, and looked at Lauren. She had that same, glazed over expression, except... she had a gun in her mouth. Darenn rolled away from Lauren, and realised she had committed suicide. Darenn began to cry openly, he didn’t care what Andy thought of him; he had run away from Shaun, and his unborn child, to God knows what cruel fate. Around him were the corpses of two international pop divas and Stu (you’re fabulous in your own right, hunnii xox). He had given up hope. Darenn staggered over to Andy’s cage, and unlocked it.

“Thank You, Darenn. The Brotherhood Shall Hear of Your Bravery.” Andy saluted Darenn, before walking away from the carnage.

“You’re welcome...” Darenn whispered as Andy walked away from him. He watched Andy leave, and checked out his ass, before turning back to Lauren. He walked towards her, and took the gun out of her mouth (Lauren loves a deepthroat ha). He felt the weight of it in his hands, and wiped it clean with the sleeve of his t-shirt. He wandered over to Andy’s cage and sat down inside it, closing the door of it behind him. He pointed the gun at his own head. Darenn closed his eyes, whispered a prayer and then uttered his last words.

“I’m sorry Shaun... name her MrGaryy, and let her grow up to be every bit as fabulous as we once were. I hope she grows up to be Garyy Faguilera, or GaGaGaryy, or Gary Port, but I just know she’s going to be a superstar. Tell her I love her, baby...” Darenn began to cry silently, before pulling the trigger.

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Andy, me, Mark, Princess, James. Not many
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Chapter 8.1

James had been traipsing through an endless amount of bushes (haha lolz) and had finally gotten sick of looking for people. None of this was his fault. Mark was a psychopath. James and Kaz had just been forced to go along with his plan. He wasn't to blame for all of this. None of this. He was innocent. James began to fall into a spiral of self hatred; he wanted off this stupid island. He was risking his life because somebody else had messed up big time. He decided to head back the way he came, and then take the three idiots in the cages to the Towers and get away from here as quickly as he could. James realised he only vaguely knew which way he was going, he couldn't remember where exactly the cages were. He began to walk in what he thought was the right direction. James came across the slain bodies of Sam!, Niamhxo and Kaz. He didn't know how to react. His initial reaction was one of horror and shock at what he was seeing, but the overriding thought he had in his head was 'it could have been me'. James' body shuddered all over. He then realised that the three of them had been shot. The sense of horror came back to him once more; and his eyes began to follow a trail of blood that was heading in the direction he was walking. Their killer was heading towards the cages. James' initial thought was to run in the opposite direction, but he knew that he had to follow the blood trail for two reasons. One, the Towers were in that direction, and two, he had to at least try and save Andy, Twilight and Stu. James hurried as quietly as he could along the trail of blood, and finally reached the site of the three cages. He began to regret his previous actions. He saw the carnage, the blood everywhere, he saw Lauren's dead body and he couldn't even begin to process what had happened. He knew now that locking wasn't always the answer - people die when you lock threads, James. He ran to Twilight's cage: the pop diva was long dead. He ran to Stu's cage, and realised Stu was still alive, although only just. Stu weakly raised a hand and waved at James.

"Pretty wacky~ huh?" Stu tried to laugh, but started coughing up blood instead.

"Jesus Stu, I'm sorry, what happened here?" James asked the dying forum member.

"Lauren... she came in here all messed up in the head. Shot Twilight, shot me, and then Darenn appeared from nowhere and she shot herself." Stu mustered up all his strength to tell James what happened.

"So where's Darenn now? And what about Andy?" James looked frantic.

Stu pointed in the direction of Andy's cage. James' eyes followed Stu's finger, and he quickly darted away from Stu's cage and ran to Andy's.

"Darenn!" James flung the cage door open.

"Hey James..." Darenn smiled despite the tears rolling down his face. James noticed the gun lying next to Darenn, the magazine of the gun lying separately from the gun, completely empty.

"Darenn... did you try to...?" James touched Darenn's shoulder.

"I tried to shoot myself, yes. But it wouldn't let me die. And d'you know why?" Darenn began to laugh hysterically.

"Why...?" James was scared.

"Because since this story began, I became a moderator! The whole premise of this story was that the last man standing would become a moderator for their troubles, but now I'm a moderator - if I win, the story's moot, if I die, there's a massive plot hole, y'know? So there's got to be more than one winner now. Or at least, I have to make it off the island alive." Darenn laughed.

"...That's not right. Kaz got absolutely merked by Lauren earlier in the story." James burst Darenn's bubble. "Sorry dude, there just wasn't any ammo in the gun. Anyway, now that you're here, you can help me carry Stu back to TiBB Towers."

Darenn looked distinctly pissed off as he clambered out of the cage. James and Darenn carried Stu out of his cage.

"We need to make a stretcher." James said as he found a long, thick piece of wood (that's definitely a dick joke). "You go fetch that conveniently placed piece of canvas and I'll grab that other long, thick piece of peni- wood."

Darenn did as he was told, and then helped James tie the stretcher together.

"What about Andy?" Darenn asked, as they moved Stu onto the stretcher.

"What do you mean?" James lifted up his end of the stretcher.

"He's still out there. Alive. Alone. He doesn't know that this is all over. He said he was going to find the Brotherhood... but how can he do that if he's on here? Does he know how to get off?"

"Well, you could go show him how to get off," James smirked. "But seriously, we have to get back to TiBB Towers as soon as possible, they'll leave without us."

"But what about Andy? If we make it back in time, we can just tell them to wait for Andy."

"Let's get going." James hurried the story along.

The two moderators, with Stu on a stretcher, hurried through the forest, keeping near to the beach, and eventually the looming site of TiBB Towers came into view.

"We're nearly there!" Darenn exclaimed, smiling at Stu who was growing weaker by the sentence.

James and Darenn broke into a near jog, being careful not to drop Stu, and made it to the bridge.

At that exact moment in time, however, Andy appeared at the bridge, on a majestic, white horse. He was clad in armour and led a charge of several knights - The Brotherhood.

"Andy!" Darenn was pleased to see him. "You made it!"

"Quiet, Fool. You were going to Leave Me Here. The Brotherhood is Not best pleased."

"He's right, Darenn. We were going to leave him here for constantly making duplicate accounts." James nodded.

"But, but you said..." Darenn looked confused.

"I'm dying here, fancy getting me into the Towers?" Stu piped up.

"We will not Go down without a Fight!" Andy roared.

"Darenn, go get back up. NOW." James cracked his fingers, and electricity sparked from his knuckles.


Darenn sprinted towards the Towers, and burst through the front door. Naturally, he had to run up a gigantic flight of stairs, all the way to the top, before he found anyone. He fell through the doorway and landed on the floor.

"Darenn!" Shaun screamed with delight. Shaun got to her feet and ran over to her jilted lover. "You're alive baby! I'm so happy!"

"I don't have time for this; there's a battle going on outside between James and the Brotherhood, we need as many mods as we can to go help him. Stu's dying out there, we need to get off this island as fast as we can." Darenn barked orders. "I'll be back soon, baby." He smiled at Shaun, and then ran back down the stairs.

Mark, Princess, Darenn, Red Moon, Vicky and 30stone charged downstairs and burst out onto the bridge. The scene in front of them was truly shocking. David, Andyman, Nathan, Remy and Andy were circling James, who was fighting a losing battle. Red Moon and Vicky crashed forwards and broke up the circle. Vicky hit Nathan with a lock, but it failed, due to Nathan's height. Nathan punched Vicky, sending her flying backwards, but she smashed into David. David kicked a football at Red Moon, but he dodged it and it hit 30stone square in the face.

Ben had been holding back from fighting; he was caught between his sense of duty and his loyalty to his friends; but David's football made his mind up. He kicked the football back, hard, and knocked David out with his curling cross. Ben and Red Moon ran towards Stu, and darted back with Stu on his stretcher, into the Towers. With Stu safe and out of the way, all the moderators needed to do was get inside the Towers, barricade it and get everyone off the island: but the Brotherhood weren't going to give up so easily.

End of Chapter 8.1


I've split this into .1 and .2 because this one was getting really long, nearly done though!!
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Chapter 8.2
Andy threw a post in all capital letters at Princess, who deftly deleted the post. He fired one of his many alternative accounts at her, which she deflected, but she deflected it towards Vicky who wasn’t expecting it. She took it in the face (dirty bitch) and fell to the ground once more, landing on top of an unconscious David. Remy charged towards Princess, but he became distracted by the vision of Sia, stepping out of TiBB Towers dressed in all white. Remy started running towards Sia, and lifted her up off her feet and hugged her tightly.

“Ma cherie!” He exclaimed, before being moved to the Admin board by Sia. Remy was suddenly on the top floor of TiBB Towers, and swore angrily as he realised he had been moderated. He was trapped inside the Towers and could no longer help his fellow Brotherhood brethren. Angry, he began to attack those on the top floor of the Towers – Shaun, Stu, Magic, Kizwiz, Rory, 30stone and Red Moon.

Sia hurried into the battle, and sent a low flying lock at Nathan’s legs. It was enough to trap his lower half behind bars; but he was still able to swipe at anyone who came close. She fired another lock at his top half, but Nathan batted the cage away with his fist; causing the cage to smash into Princess’ head. The blow was enough to send her careering off the side of the bridge, and into the sea. Sia howled with rage and charged at Nathan, launching herself at him at the last possible moment and knocked him over. She scrambled away from the angry giant, and fired a lock at his back, finally incapacitating him. Nathan tensed his shoulders and began to thrash around as much as he could, and was visibly weakening the bars of his cage. Sia knew she would have to take Nathan out once and for all. She strengthened the lock; and then began to move Nathan with her mod powers. Sia lifted Nathan, trapped in two cages, over the side of the bridge. She braced herself, she didn’t want to be a killer, but she had to do it.

“I’m sorry Nathan!” Sia cried, as she dropped him into the sea. He would sink and drown before he broke out of his cages. Sia sighed a sigh of relief, and turned around, ready to battle once more; but she too was sent over the edge by Andyman. Sia screamed as she fell into the water. She thrashed around in the water for a few moments, trying to gather her bearings, and then felt a powerful grip around her waist. She let out a scream underwater – wasting precious air – as she realised Nathan had a hold on her, and was going to cause her to drown. Sia tried to escape, but his grip was truly iron, and she closed her eyes and thought of Remy as she breathed her last.

Remy had gotten into a scrap with 30stone; the two hard men (no, not like that) of TiBB finally taking each other on in an inevitable showdown (it wasn’t really inevitable at all, but for the sake of this story with no real plotline, let’s say it is.) They brawled, smashing lots of stupidly placed items that can be smashed, in the process of their fight. Meanwhile, Red Moon and Rory huddled over Kizzy, Shaun, Stu and Magic.

“We have to help Ben get Remy out of here, or we’ll all die. If he even figures out how to get to the helipad, we’re screwed. There are two choppers up there. Each has room to take six people, but that includes a pilot and co-pilot. Only moderators know how to fly choppers, so we need four of us to make it off the island. There’s Mark, James, Princess, Darenn, Vicky and Sia outside; plus the seven of us up here... ****.” Roy cursed.

“Maybe we should just leave now and let them all fight over who’s leaving, I mean, there’s six of us here, two moderators included, maybe we should just bail out now while we still can?” Magic suggested, because he’s banned it means I can make him the token heartless bastard of the group with no backlash.

“Are you out of your mind?!” Shaun screeched in the tone that only a pissy pregnant woman can achieve. Weird, as he’s male. “I’m not leaving Darenn! Not again!”

“It’s not that bad a suggestion, Shu.” Rory tried to calm Shaun down. “I mean, they’ll be fine, they’re all moderators, they’re skilled at what they do and they knew the risks of accepting the job.”

“Why the hell aren’t you out there then, Rory?! Why is my Darenn out there!?” Shaun was crying.

“Hey look, a distraction!” Rory played that old chestnut, and Shaun fell for it beautifully. Rory began to run for the hidden doorway which led to the stairs to the helipad.

“Aw **** it.” Roy muttered. He grabbed Kizwiz by the hand and the two ran after Rory; followed quickly by Magic.

“Please Shaun... help me to the chopper...” Stu’s voice was very faint now. Shaun’s own worry about Darenn subsided; Stu’s life was very much in his hands.

“Alright, let’s go.” Shaun lifted Stu up onto his feet, and helped Stu towards the stairs. The two staggered up the steps, and were soon onto the helipad, where the chopper was ready for takeoff. Red Moon was piloting, Rory was the co-pilot, just so you can picture this scene really well. Good. Shaun helped Stu into the helicopter, and then stood beside it, staring hopefully at the door.

“Come on Shaun! Get in! We have to go now!” Rory yelled at his friend. “Darenn can handle himself no problem, get in!”

“I don’t want to leave him!” Shaun screamed.

“We have to go now Sun! We can’t wait for him!” Rory confused the story with the plot of LOST when they’re leaving the island on the helicopter, and Sun’s all like NO MY HUSBAND IS COMING RLY SOON YOU GUISE and they’re all like **** WOMAN and then it takes off and Jin appears and it’s all really sad because the freighter blows up and Sun’s like NOOOOOOOooOOoOoooooOOOOO... anyway, Shaun got into the helicopter. It took off, with no sign of Darenn bursting out of the stairwell.

Remy and Ben were still fighting as the group left the top room of the Towers; and Remy noticed them leaving. He tried to dash towards the stairs, but Ben dump tackled Remy, who hit his head against the table on his way down, knocking him out instantly. Ben lifted Remy up, and hurried as fast as he could down the stairs, back to the battle outside, Remy in tow.

James, Mark and Darenn were in a stand off against Andyman and Andy. In between the two groups, lay the unconscious bodies of Vicky and David. James eventually made the first move, charging at the two Andys but was knocked to the ground by the sheer fat content of Andyman’s new signature which he uploaded that second. Andy darted forward and grabbed James, holding him by the neck and took him hostage.

“Give Us another Moderator and We will Stop making Multiple Accounts.” Andy demanded.

“Never!” Mark shouted.

“Fine. We’ll play this your way.” Andyman shrugged nonchalantly. “Break his neck, Andy.” He motioned to James, who struggled fiercely. Andy complied.

“James! No!” Mark started to run forwards, but stopped himself. “You bastards! You won’t get away with this!”

Ben burst outside with Remy on his shoulders, and ran to Mark and Darenn’s side.

“Remy!” Andyman shouted, horrified. Mark glared at Andyman, then turned to Ben.

“Ben, kill Remy. They killed James.” Mark commanded.

“Sorry Mark, but I’m not going to.” Ben shrugged his shoulders, and he walked over to beside Andyman and Andy. He dumped Remy at their feet. “Everyone upstairs ran to the helipad. They’re probably long gone by now. We’ve got nothing to fight for now. I’m going back to the Brotherhood.”

Mark looked furious. Ben had clearly forgotten that Princess, Stu and Niamh had come to the island via a second helicopter that was still there. He knew there was no hope for him and Darenn to both make it to the helicopter; the Brotherhood would follow them and they wouldn’t stand a chance of flying away before they caught up with them. He knew that this was his fault; and the only way he could try and make up for it would be to cause a distraction to allow Darenn and Vicky to escape. But he needed Vicky to wake up first, and he needed to tell them his plan. He considered using the mod board, but Ben could read it and might tell the Brotherhood. He had to take a chance... Mark sent the message.

Darenn read the new thread in the mod board, and instantly was horrified. Mark couldn’t be serious. He turned to look at the admin of TiBB; cutting an imposing figure as he stared down the surviving members of the Brotherhood. He knew that all they were waiting for was Vicky to come around; but they had to hope she would manage to get away from the Brotherhood if she did wake up. Darenn and Mark edged closer to the unconscious bodies in the middle.

“Why don’t we fight this like men, Andyman? You and me, away from here, let Darenn and Vicky go.” Mark tried to reason with him.

“Oh, yeah sure.” Andyman smiled at him, and the two walked away from the others, into the forest.

“Oh.” Andy looked surprised.

“Yeah.” Darenn agreed. “I was kinda expecting them to get into an epic fight there. Can I take Vicky and head into the tower?”

“Y’know What, go for it. My beef was With Mark and James anyway. You let me go once before, so I’m Returning the Favour. See you in another Life, brother.” Andy ripped off Desmond from LOST.

Darenn picked Vicky up, and hobbled into the TiBB Towers, closing the door behind him. At least Mark’s plan was going to go ahead, even if it had unfolded in a weird way. He hurried up the stairs as fast as he could, eventually making it through the doors into the top floor of the Tower. He glanced out the window, and saw the tiny figure of Mark in the middle of a circle consisting of Andyman, Andy, 30stone, Remy and David (the latter of whom had recovered). Darenn wondered what Mark was saying to them, what his last words were going to be, but he knew he had no time for that. Darenn dragged Vicky up the stairs and made it to the helicopter. He buckled Vicky into the co-pilot’s seat, and he rushed round to the pilot’s seat. He started the engines, and said a prayer for Mark. He had never been a religious person, but he truly hoped that if there was an afterlife, Mark wouldn’t be treated too badly in it. The helicopter took off, and headed in the direction of somewhere better than here. Somewhere free.

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