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Old 09-02-2009, 06:30 PM #126
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Edited to include episode 3 and a few teasers from episode 4!

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Previously in the pilot episode-

Supernoodles house
Fom pulls away from his kiss with Supernoodles
Fom: I have to go, This shouldn’t be happening, not after what happened last time!
Supernoodles: Please don’t!
Fom: If she finds out, I am Dead! So I’m out
Fom Leaves. Supernoodles sits down and cries

Outside in the square
Fom is sitting on the bench alone. Ninastar is walking back home from the vic to her house. She spots Fom on the bench and sits next to him.
Ninastar: Bad day?
Fom: Huh, oh, Ninastar
Ninastar: What’s wrong?
Fom: Uh, Nothing, like you said, just a bad day
Ninastar: Come on. Lets go home, we need to write a guest list, Maybe we can add the bump to the wedding
Fom: What?
Ninastar: Fom, you’re going to be a daddy. I’m Pregnant!
Foms angry face turns to a shocked one, as he looks at Ninastar

Supernoodles house
Supernoodles is still crying, as she looks down at a pregnancy test, it reads positive

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Episode 1-

Annies house
Annie gets up and opens the curtains. It is a sunny day in the square, and today the Vic is holding a birthday party for the owner, Mark. Annie walks out into the kitchen and puts some toast in the toaster. She picks up a paper and reads the “women seeking men” section
Annie: MUM!!!

The queen vic
Christina, Daughter of the owner, is putting up banners. She is quite a smart 21 year old girl, who is disliked by her brother and dad
Christina: Have you done the balloons Sam?
Sam: No, and I do not plan to either, if you want balloons, you can do them yourself
Christina: Well, if you are going to be like that, then do not bother! This is our dads birthday I am trying to organise and you have not helped one little bit!
Sam: He wouldn’t do all of this for us
Christina: Well, at least he tries! You haven’t done anything all morning.
Sam: Well I have been busy!
Christina: Busy doing what? Flirting with your new Girlfriend?
Sam: Hannah is not my new girlfriend. Just a friend I go to college with! And even if I am seeing her, at least I can find somebody!
Sam walks out of the door in a huff, Christina puts her hands on her hips and sighs

Annies house
BigSister- Yes Dear?
Annie: What is this?
Annie flashes the newspaper at her
BigSister: What, is your mother not allowed to find a nice man now that she has hit 50?
Annie: I never said you were not allowed, but with an advertisement like that, he is going to have a shock when you do meet someone!
BigSister: What do you mean?
Annie reads from her mums advertisement
Annie: “A young and sassy mid 30s girl, slim and tall, who likes long nights in and holidays away”
BigSister: So?
Annie: Mum! You are in your 50’s, you are not sassy, you are short and stumpy and you hate holidays abroad!
BigSister: Well, I may have tweaked a few things, but he is not going to care when he gets here!
Annie: When who gets here?
With that the doorbell rings
Annie: You haven’t!


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Episode 2-

Fom and Ninastars house
Ninastar: How about Nelly for a girl and Daniel for a boy?
Fom: Look Babe, we do not even know if it is a girl or a boy yet
Ninastar: Well it is nice to make plans! Do you think we should have the wedding before or after the baby? I think aft…
Fom: look, I have to go a minute, I will be back soon
Fom Leaves

The Queen Vic
Christina: Is everything ready?
Princess: Yes, the banners are up, and I have laid out all of the food.
Christina: Oh Food! Where is Nickyy with that cake she was supposed to be making?
Gregalz: Well she has closed the café for today, so either she is not making it, or she is too busy to open the café because she is making it
Christina: Well I do hope it is the second one, we need that cake or else the whole thing is ruined!
Nickyy enters, holding a poorly made cake. Nickyy is in her late 30‘s. She is the owner of the Café “Nickyys”.
Nickyy: Never fear, I am Here!
Christina: Thank god! Or may I say, Oh my god! What the Hell is that!
Nickyy: A Cake, I spent hours on the decoration!
Christina: If you think I am paying for that, then you are wrong! Sam could make a better cake than that and he is 14!
Nickyy: What on earth do you mean? I spent hours making this beauty, so you are paying for it nonetheless!
Gregalz: It’ll have to do, Mark is coming!
Christina: Someone, Lights!
the lights are turned off and everything is pitch black, the door to the bar opens, and there is a huge thud
Mark: Aghh!
Christina: Dad?
The lights are turned back on. Mark is lying on the floor, and a pile of books have been knocked over and are sprawled beside him
Christina: Dad!
Mark: I Think I have broken something, Who the hell turned the lights off!
Christina: It was supposed to be a surprise party for you!
Mark: Well Surprise Surprise Christina!

Annie and BigSisters house
BigSister: Annie, go out the back, he is here!
Annie: Who is here!
BigSister: The man who replied to my advert, his name is Darenn, Now Go!
Annie: Aghh, you know what mum, you can handle this, I’m out!
Annie runs up the stairs. BigSister goes and answers the door. Darenn stands there, he is wearing a pink vest top and leopard print trousers he is 35 years old, and very much Gay..
BigSister: Well, you are not what I expected dear!
Darenn: Well neither are you hunny! I am supposed to be meeting a guy?
BigSister: A Guy?

Supernoodles house
Supernoodles and Fom are sitting on the sofa
Supernoodles: I have something to tell you
Fom: Don’t tell me you’re pregnant too!
Supernoodles stares at Fom. It is clear to him now that she actually is pregnant
Fom: I can’t do this!
Fom walks out of the house
Supernoodles: Fom! FOM!
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Episode 3

In Annie and BigSisters house

BigSister and Darenn are sitting at a table, drinking tea
BigSister: Well, why did you answer my advertisement if you wanted to meet a bloke?
Darenn: Well, I must of got the wrong number. One minutes i am expecting a kind and caring guy to sweep me off my feet, and now i have got you
BigSister: What is wrong with me?
Darenn: You are a woman?
BigSister: And?
Darenn: Well i'm gay!
BigSister: Are you?
Darenn: Oh my.

The Queen Vic
Christina: The ambulance should be here shortly dad
Mark: Well thank god! it's about time. You kids, always causig me trouble!
Christina: Dad, we were trying to give you a party for your 50th!
Mark: Yes, and look what you made of it!
Christina: I was just trying to make you happy Dad
Mark: Well i will not be happy until my Boy is here, Where is Sam!?
Gregalz: Gone to meet his new girlfriend, Or Friend as he says
Mark: Girlfriend! At his age! He is only 15! I want him here at once, who knows what he could be doing with this girl?!
Christina: Dad, don't worry, we need to take care of you at the moment.
Mark: Christina, Go away, you are no help to anybody around here, I wouldn't really notice if you ran away to Africa
Christina: Well maybe i should, At least i would get some thanks for organising a party there!
Mark: Fine go, they can have your troublesome ways!
Christina: FINE!
Christina bursts into tears and runs out of the queen vic, Firewire runs after her. Firewire is a very masculine 32 year old. He likes money but will do anything to help somebody. He is single and lives on his own
Firewire: Christina!
Christina: Leave me alone Firewire!
Christina carries on running, Firewire still running after her
Firewire: He didn't mean it mate, he was just joking
Christina turns around
Christina: Yes he did! He hates me!
Firewire: Don't be stupid! You are his daughter! why would he hate you?
Christina: That is the thing.. I am not his daughter, just his step-daughter, and now Mum has died, he doesn't care about me anymore! All he cares about is Sam.. his "Blood" son!
Christina Breaks down in the middle of the road, Firewire comes and picks her up
Firewire: Lets go back to mine, you look like you could do with a cup of tea. Come on, we can talk about it later

In Annie and BigSisters house

Annie has come downstairs, she is at the table in fits of laughter
Annie: This is the funniest thing EVER!
BigSister: No it is not Annie, it is just a misunderstanding
Darenn: A very big one! Do you have any hotels or B&B's around here? You see i come from Liverpool, and it is nearly Dark now.
BigSister: Well there is a B&B over the road?
Darenn: Oh very well, i will be off then
Annie: Mum! You cannot let him go over to the B&B! Do you know how much Princess charges to people she does not know!
BigSister: Well, where else can he go?
Annie: He can stay here for the night!

The back of a Cab

It is now midnight, Fom is sitting in the back of a Cab
Callum: Where do you want me to take you then mate?
Fom: To the airport please
Callum: Very well, where are you going then?
Fom: Anywhere, away from here
Fom looks up at Supernoodles house, and then at his own house. Ninastar is looking out of the window
Fom- (Whispering) I'm sorry
[i] The Cab drives off into the distance

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So there you go! Come join me tomorrow at 7pm for episode 4! To keep you going you can have a few snippets from tomorrows episode!


[spoil]Christina sits up and Kisses Him, he pushes her away[/spoil]


[spoil]Fom: Get out of there now.. It is you i want![/spoil]

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Oh It is good so far Lewis.
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Thanks Firewire! Be sure to read the 3rd one!
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Thanks Ninastar x
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ooooh good workvery good so far
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Thanks Supernoodles x
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How very dramatic! I don't think Bigsister's gonna liek that fact that you said she's 50 but ah well.

Good start!
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Ooer its good :P Just a little nitpick, my age changed from 14 to 15 lol. Keep me at 15 :P But yeh, I liked it!
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LOOOL!
Oh cringeee!
And Sam hates me
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LOOOL!
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I feel like bloody David Platt haha
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Quote:
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Quote:
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LOOOL!
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And Sam hates me
I feel like bl***y David Platt haha
I do not mean to offend members when writing lines and characters x
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Thankyou for all of the u2us x
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Quote:
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LOOOL!
Oh cringeee!
And Sam hates me
I feel like bl***y David Platt haha
Lool dont tell me im the teen who gets preggaz at the age of 14
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Quote:
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You have more of a love scene tomorrow hun
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Quote:
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Quote:
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Quote:
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LOOOL!
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And Sam hates me
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