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Old 05-03-2020, 05:21 PM   #51
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...okay so that was a perfect ending for the continuation, Scarlett...the battles were quite intense...both of the Rivenlake Skies and between Ariel and Rory...Lumina is very sinister and obviously Rory will be looking for his revenge...so I fear the group won’t all survive these two enemies......I loved it, your writing is excellent, Scarlett...and the story had me enthralled from the beginning and didn’t lose its grip..thank you for a thrilling read and for the introduction to some wonderful dark and light characters......

...I’ve read the prologue for The Luna Legacy...and the cover again is totally gorgeous.....
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Rory has fallen completely to his primal rage now, no longer trying to fit into society, all he cares about now is his vengeance.

The Airship battle was really enjoyable to write, as it introduced a whole new group into the story, while being really important to the continuing story


Glad you liked the cover, I tried a few different types of cover, but decided to go with a similar style, I really like it too! I plan to continue the story almost right away, so there will be no real wait
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Old 07-03-2020, 12:30 AM   #52
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I meant to publish a new chapter last night but forgot to hit the button, its up now!

I didn't write a new chapter today though, I went back and tidied up some grammar and spelling errors in Wynd Academy
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Old 07-03-2020, 06:18 AM   #53
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....oh exciting, Iíll look forward to reading the chapter a bit later...(..when Iím fully awake..)....
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Old 07-03-2020, 12:51 PM   #54
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...The Luna Legacy, chapter 2 spoiler...

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...we know that the sight of the sun setting peacefully over Ishtall is not a scene that weíre going to become very familiar with.....the contrast in the lightness in their moods and the brightness of their surroundings being mirrored to that of Rory...?...a perfectly sinister vibe for the start, Scarlett.. but still balancing that lightness with the dark as well...
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Old 07-03-2020, 02:11 PM   #55
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...we know that the sight of the sun setting peacefully over Ishtall is not a scene that weíre going to become very familiar with.....the contrast in the lightness in their moods and the brightness of their surroundings being mirrored to that of Rory...?...a perfectly sinister vibe for the start, Scarlett.. but still balancing that lightness with the dark as well...
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Indeed, lol

Both Amanda and Rory are trapped in the darkness while for once the heroes get time in the light, lol
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Old 08-03-2020, 10:28 AM   #56
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...chapter 3 spoiler...


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...wow at that chapter, so much going on to absorb...I love that each Crystal has a defender/protector and I especially loved the idea of Ceres, the protector of Terrana...imagine if atm our very own virus was transmitted through poisons in pollen...?...so that was quite thought provoking...also, Syl, so longing to see his sister and yet so resistant to seeing her as well, thatís so heartbreaking...you captured that loneliness so well..and Andre Spectra, Iím holding my breath to see what that alliance will bring...A Good Defence, a good chapter.....
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...wow at that chapter, so much going on to absorb...I love that each Crystal has a defender/protector and I especially loved the idea of Ceres, the protector of Terrana...imagine if atm our very own virus was transmitted through poisons in pollen...?...so that was quite thought provoking...also, Syl, so longing to see his sister and yet so resistant to seeing her as well, thatís so heartbreaking...you captured that loneliness so well..and Andre Spectra, Iím holding my breath to see what that alliance will bring...A Good Defence, a good chapter.....
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Indeed! That's what inspired me when writing Celes' powers, she could be a very deadly weapon to the enemies of the city

My original plan in the first story was for him to basically have Rory's place as a villian, but I felt there was enough people who were bent to Lumina's will already, and it'd be interesting if someone actually resisted her
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Old 09-03-2020, 06:57 PM   #58
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...chapter 4 spoiler...

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....ooooo Ariel vs Victoria is surely a battle that is going to happen in the future and one I look forward to...
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Indeed, and Victoria isn't completely in the wrong in wanting vengance, Ariel did steal her life and identity, even if she had no awareness of her being captured
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...spoilers, chapters 5 and 6...

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...wow, so much to absorb again, you really do write skilfully in the layers that you build, Scarlett.....the alter of light and the powers it has given Rory and what is the fifteenth element...its power must surely be greater than the sword of light and surely defeat it..long live the Empress, hmmmmm...?....And Corporal Manners is an interesting new character, the story is building beautifully...(...and very exciting..)...
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...wow, so much to absorb again, you really do write skilfully in the layers that you build, Scarlett.....the alter of light and the powers it has given Rory and what is the fifteenth element...its power must surely be greater than the sword of light and surely defeat it..long live the Empress, hmmmmm...?....And Corporal Manners is an interesting new character, the story is building beautifully...(...and very exciting..)...
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Thank you! Someone on the site didn't seem to be happy that Roisin had gotten powers, and thought Rory was a bad villain because he's weird

I'm looking forward to revealing more as time goes on

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...chapter 7 spoiler...
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...somehow I didnít expect a full Ishtallian Breakfast to be so similar to a full English Breakfast......(..Iím thinking that it was probably scrambled dragon eggs, though...
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Haha, maybe! Though with the size of the dragon that flew over Rivenlake, they're more likely to be Wyvern eggs

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..chapter 8 spoiler...

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...I loved the chapter title btw, the white rose of her beautiful dress on the night she died...so Amanda ordered the deaths of Roisinís parents...but she spared Atlas, no attempt was made to take his life and yet they were enemies...and she must have known that in leaving him alive, he would be seeking revenge...it was obviously a mixture of emotions in that chapter because of the brutal deaths of Ruth and Darenth...but i also enjoyed the layer of depth at knowing Roisinís back story of how she lost her parents, and we felt more, the closeness of her relationship with her uncle...
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Indeed, I felt this chapter was a good time to expand on Atlas' story, while telling more of Roisin's past too, there's definitely more to tell about what happened after that night
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....chapter 9 spoiler...


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...so is Roisin really the one true empress, what is her connection to the ancient Emperor, Andre...is she a descendant...and the power and significance of her dreams, which is something her mother also experienced, so this is a huge Ďbloodlineí chapter, Scarlett../...another great chapter......
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We're finding out more and more about the Luna bloodline as time goes on now
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...chapter 10 spoiler...

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...oh Lord, no time to rejoice the defeat of Rory...(..Lumina is darkness personified...)...but the Wynd Academy, is it doomed to the fate of the Snow White eyes..oh my Lord...
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...oh Lord, no time to rejoice the defeat of Rory...(..Lumina is darkness personified...)...but the Wynd Academy, is it doomed to the fate of the Snow White eyes..oh my Lord...
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Yep! It's all going to hell back at Wynd Academy :O
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...it’s been a strange few days and I haven’t done any reading but I’m going to try to catch up with this later, Scarlett... I’m looking forward to it.....
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...it’s been a strange few days and I haven’t done any reading but I’m going to try to catch up with this later, Scarlett... I’m looking forward to it.....
Indeed it has! I took a few days break from writing to recharge, real life stuff was making it harder to do!

(Didnt notice you'd replied btw!)
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I did posters for the four main characters!
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Began work on a map!
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