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Old 12-01-2014, 12:34 AM #1
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The estate will be sadly ending. I purely don't have the time anymore to write episodes. There will be one final episode before it's go. The episode will be written by Cal(Who is she?)

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I'm debating on who to have to play Maddy. Who would you have ?
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You should base characters around certain soaps and then you can describe how each of them would fit in/where they'd work and all of that
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I Can easily make characters but trying to writing them I'm awful

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That's a good idea. I might do that after I have finished my cast.
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..you have some good characters, Jack...it would be nice to create a storyline around them one day..?...(and I don't think that you need to get a life, it's a nice thing to do with your time and very creative..)...
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The first episode will be up in the next few days
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The episode begins with Bianca sitting at the table crying her eyes out. Bianca has just had a phone call to inform her that her son that's been serving Afghanistan had been killed. Bianca sits alone in the kitchen looking at the picture of her son on her phone. Tears dipping on to the screen. She wipes her tears away before shouting the kids to come downstairs. Bianca sits the kids around the table. "I've got some bad news" tears start running down Bianca's face. Joe can tell there is something seriously wrong.

Meanwhile Will Potter is having a shower when he discovers a lump on his testicle. Will quickly gets out of the shower to have a better feel. As he feels the size of the lump he falls to the floor and starts to cry. Will quickly gets dressed. Will is shaken sitting on the floor in his bedroom. Will beings to panic because his uncle died of testicular cancer 3 years ago.

Back at the Spencer house Bianca is in floods of tears as she tells the kids that Callum has been killed. Emily runs out of the room screaming "Your lying". Bianca quickly chases after her. Bianca sits on the stairs with Emily and holds her tight. "Everything is gunna be alright darling" Bianca tells Emily as a tears run down both women's faces.

At the Potters house Will is too scared to go to the doctors incase he has got what his uncle had. When Will has the courage to rings the doctors the receptionist tell him the only doctor available is a female doctor. Will is too embarrassed to go see a female doctor. Will sits on the edge of his bed thinking what he is going to do next. Samantha walks into his bedroom. She looks at Will "Sweetheart have you been crying" Sam says worryingly. Will tells her that he hit his toe on the his bed and it made his eyes water. As Sam leaves the room she knows that something is a matter and that Will is not telling her the true.

At the spenders house. Bianca is about to cook the dinner. "Kids what do you want for your dinner" Bianca shouts to the kids. Joe tells Bianca to forget about the food. "Come in the living room mum we can get a takeaway" Joe says as he sits on the sofa with Bianca and Emily. A tear runs down Bianca's face as she cuddles up to her two kids.

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I like it Jack, a lot of sad things happening though. Like the Bianca character
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I like it Jack, a lot of sad things happening though. Like the Bianca character
Well the next episode will be another sad one but after that it will ok
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Episode 2 will focus on Callum's funeral with Alison Steadman will be guest staring for one episode as Bianca's mother Sandra,.
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Episode 2
The episode starts with Bianca sitting in Callum's room holding one of his tops. As a tear runs down her face,she hears a knock on the door. She quickly rushes down the stairs. "Hello sweetheart" says Sandra Bianca's mother. Bianca is so happy to see her mother. The girls walk into the kitchen. As Sandra sits down at the kitchen table she asks Bianca how she is coping. Bianca tells her that's she fine. "Are you really" says Sandra. Bianca shakes her head before breaking down. "No ma I'm not I miss him so much" Sandra gives Bianca a hug before taking her upstairs to get ready for the funeral

Meanwhile on the estate. Heather is opening up the estate agents. Cain walks In the door. "Where the hell have you been,Your 15 minutes late" Say heather. Cain tells her that he had overslept and it won't happen again. As Cain is saying this to heather she sees George walking passed. Heather quickly runs out on to the street "George,Come here I need to speak to you"Shouts heather. George asks heather what she wants. She tells him that she wants him to come to hers tonight to help her with some "Jobs".

Back at the Spencer household. The hurst has arrive. As Emily walks out the front door and see the coffin. Tears run down her face. Sandra give her a tissue before walking her to the funeral cars. On the way to the church Bianca reads the last letter Callum sent to her before he got killed. As the family arrive at the church they are met by Elissa Campbell. Who starts asking questions,She asks Bianca if she feels that it's her fault that her son died because she should of never let him go. "Joe will you please get this girl away from me" Bianca says. Joe tells Elissa that she better leave now or he will call the police.

At the pub. The potters are getting the pub ready for the wake. "It's awful all these young boys getting killed fighting for us"Diana says to Frank. Will walks into the bar with the food. Will is still worrying about the lump that he found the other week. "You alright sweetheart you look worried about something. What to tell nan what's a matter" Diana says to will. Will tells her that there is nothing wrong before going upstairs. Frank tells Diana that it will just be some girl will is worrying about.

Back at the church. The coffin is being lowered into the ground. "we commit his body to the ground; earth to earth; ashes to ashes, dust to dust. The Lord bless him and keep him, the Lord make his face to shine upon him and be gracious unto him and give him peace. Amen." Bianca tells the family she wants a few minutes alone. Bianca stands by the graveside looking up at the sky. "Bye bye Sweetheart, Sleep tight up there" Says Bianca before blowing one kiss up into the sky before a walking back to the family.
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Episode 3
The episode starts with the estate all in darkness. There has been a power cut.
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On the estate Elissa is trying to write her next article in the dark. As she struggles to write. She hears a loud noise come from the kitchen. So she gets up and heads into the kitchen. As she gets into there she sees someone running out of the backdoor. She sees that there is a letter on the side that the person has left address to her. Elissa reads the message. The message reads the following "You mess with our lives now it's time to mess with yours" Elissa thinks nothing of it and throws the letter in the bin before heading back into the living room.

Elsewhere on the estate. Heather is sitting in the living room drinking her Vodka when she gets a phone call from the hospital saying that her brother Gavin had fallen down the stairs and broken his ankle and that he needs someone to pick him up. Heather puts the phone down before downing her vodka and getting her coat. As she is about to leave the house. George knocks on the door. "You wanted to see me" Heather let's George in before they start to kiss.

At the West house. Ziggy and Will are in Ziggys bedroom drinking. Ziggy starts telling Will he slept with 2 women the other night. Ziggy goes on to tell will that he was "Off his face". What did you take then? Will says. Ziggy tells him he think it's was Cocaine but he is not sure, he tells Will that he got it off Lay. "I've got a bag here,Wanna try some" Ziggy tells Will. Will feels pressured into taking it. Just as Will gets up for by the table Jackie opens the door. "Alright boys,Pizza downstairs if you want some" Says Jackie. Will tells Ziggy that he is feeling so ****ing good.

Back Howlett house. Heather and George are lying in bed when Heather remembers that she needs to pick her Brother up from the hospital. "George your gunna have to go" Heather says. George asks her why she is in so much of a rush to get rid of him. "George just piss off, I need to go" Heather says as she puts her shoes on before leaving the house and heading to the hospital. Heather leaves George alone in the house. Heather has not told George that she has a lodger staying there with her. George falls to sleep. When he walks up to hear the door go. He quickly goes to the top of the stairs but naked. Only to be greeted by Heathers new lodger Daz. As Daz walks pass George at the top of the stairs he turns around and says "Got a nice Sausage there".
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Loving it lol thought Heather might have crashed with downing the vodka or something maybe? lol Its a bit like Eastenders that's a compliment by the way. I look forward to the next part.
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