My first short film

[Will.]

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Feedback comments on YouTube would be grateful.

(Try to be positive though as this is my final edit :laugh:)

[Marsh.]

Ok, just started and already I notice the obvious part where she starts the car at the beginning, instead of it looking like she's been driving and is pulling up at home. :hee:

[jackc1806]

welp at the is she dead text

[Marsh.]

Not them ruining the grand plan by texting a confession.

[Will.]

Not them ruining the grand plan by texting a confession.

I did it with actual speaking at first.

[_Tom_]

Great work Will!

An improvement on the first edit, this version feels much more eerie! :clap1:

[Mokka]

Great Job Will!!! :thumbs:

[Cherie]

I liked it Will..some good camera work there...minor thing when she read the text you could see it was from Mum rather than twin..I liked the ending and change of clothes

[Daniel-X]

I actually thought t was really well edited and put together. Well done Will. Only minor thing is like Marsh said you can tell the car is being started rather than being parked at the beginning.

[Marsh.]

I liked it Will..some good camera work there...minor thing when she read the text you could see it was from Mum rather than twin..I liked the ending and change of clothes

It was supposed to be from mum. :nono: The other twin was dead silly.

[Will.]

Great Job Will!!! :thumbs:

Thanks :)

I liked it Will..some good camera work there...minor thing when she read the text you could see it was from Mum rather than twin..I liked the ending and change of clothes

Thank you! :)

I actually thought t was really well edited and put together. Well done Will. Only minor thing is like Marsh said you can tell the car is being started rather than being parked at the beginning.

Thank you :)

[Will.]

The woman in the film is a TiBB member :smug:

[Jack.]

The woman in the film is a TiBB member :smug:

:suspect: Who is she? :suspect:

[Jack.]

I don't mean Cal i'm asking which member it is :laugh:

[Will.]

:suspect: Who is she? :suspect:

:hehe:

[Babayaro.]

The woman in the film is a TiBB member :smug:

Not Josy! Ha breakthrough performance?

[Will.]

Not Josy! Ha breakthrough performance?

Next stop EastEnders? Then X-Men?

[arista]

Not Josy! Ha breakthrough performance?


No Josy is Not that old
you punk

[Babayaro.]

:joker:

[Will.]

No Josy is Not that old
you punk

I thought Josy was older tbh.

[Cherie]

It was supposed to be from mum. :nono: The other twin was dead silly.

:worry: have I lost the plot line

[Will.]

:worry: have I lost the plot line

Basically:

Karen is the lonely woman who just inherited her grandmothers fortune.

The mother didn't get it due to family conflict.

The evil twin (Katherine) and the mum team up to get the money.

Katherine kills Karen to get the money.

Katherine uses Karen's phone to inform the mother that Karen is dead.

[Jamie89]

It's really good, well done Will :amazed: