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mizzy25 13-04-2014 08:54 PM

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Originally Posted by Benjamin (Post 6792230)
Storylines that are happening in the next few months

Pregnancy - Shaun
Stalker revealed - Greg
Wallis family arrive - Saph, Reece and Germ
A resident commits suicide - CharlieO
New club opens - Orangu For You
Coming out storyline - Most of TiBB
A miscarriage(Not related to the pregnancy storyline) - Marc
Shock murder - Arista kills Salman over love affair
A fire - In Nailsworth Natter
7 Characters exits - Josy, Novo, Locke, Drew (in nailsworth fire), Salman killed, Niamh and thetruth run off to start a new life together in Benidorm
Drugs storyline - Karl gets Gypsygoth into smack
Engagement - Joe and his imaginary wife
Two new characters - bwoty and thesocialgroup guy

Im slightly gripped by these storylines lol

Natalie. 13-04-2014 09:03 PM

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Originally Posted by Benjamin (Post 6792230)
Storylines that are happening in the next few months

Pregnancy - Shaun
Stalker revealed - Greg
Wallis family arrive - Saph, Reece and Germ
A resident commits suicide - CharlieO
New club opens - Orangu For You
Coming out storyline - Most of TiBB
A miscarriage(Not related to the pregnancy storyline) - Marc
Shock murder - Arista kills Salman over love affair
A fire - In Nailsworth Natter
7 Characters exits - Josy, Novo, Locke, Drew (in nailsworth fire), Salman killed, Niamh and thetruth run off to start a new life together in Benidorm
Drugs storyline - Karl gets Gypsygoth into smack
Engagement - Joe and his imaginary wife
Two new characters - bwoty and thesocialgroup guy

:laugh:

Jack. 17-04-2014 01:08 PM

I can reveal that two of the characters leaving are the West sisters

Pete. 17-04-2014 05:58 PM

gonna get into this

Pete. 17-04-2014 06:18 PM

read through it - amazing and the website is flawless

Jack. 17-04-2014 07:07 PM

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Originally Posted by Petemitch (Post 6802738)
read through it - amazing and the website is flawless

Thanks :) I've still not finished the website :joker:

mizzy25 24-04-2014 09:11 PM

whens the next episode please?

Jack. 24-04-2014 09:25 PM

I'll be posting a few episodes next week. I have written them. But there at my house and I'm at my sisters until next Tuesday :)

Jack. 27-04-2014 12:35 PM

Episode 9

The episode starts with Diana sitting at the kitchen table waiting for Frank to come home. Diana knows that Frank will go mad when he finds out what she has spent the loan money on. Diana hears the door go "Is that you Frank" Shouts Diana. "No it's me mum" says Thomas as he walks into the kitchen. Thomas asks Diana what is a matter as he can see the worry on her face "Nothing son I'm fine" Says Diana. Thomas knows that she is lying about something.

Meanwhile on the estate Jarred is walking back from the shops. Jarred has finished work early today. As Jarred walks into the flat he hears noises coming from the living room. As he open the door he sees Andrea and Frank Naked on the sofa. "What the hell, do you think you're doing, Get out of my flat Now!!!" Shouts Jarred. Frank quickly gets his clothes on before rushing out of the door. "I told you to end it, but no you don't listen do you" Jarred says to Andrea.

Over at the hospital Daz is sitting on the bed waiting for the doctor to come and tell him when he will be having his operation. Daz is shocked as he sees George walk in through the door. "Hi what are you doing here, I haven't seen you since great night" says Daz. George tells Daz that they were both drunk and that he didn't want a stupid kiss ruining their friendship. "I'm really happy that we can still be friends" Says Daz before giving George an awkward hug.

Back at the pub. Frank walks into the kitchen " Frank sit down I have something to you " says Diana. Frank sits down at the table to listen to what Diana has to tell him. Diana passes the letter over to Frank and tells him to read it. Frank reads the letter before throwing it on the floor"What the hell have you spent £25,000 on" just as Diana is about to tell Frank there is a knock on the door.

Meanwhile at heathers house. Heather is having her lunch when George walks in"He has fallen for it, He thinks that me and him are now best mates" George tells Heather with a smile on his face. Heather asks George if Daz mentioned anything about his money. "No he didn't say anything about it" George says to Heather. "Remember you do whatever you have to do to get that money" Heather tells George. George looks and smiles at Heather before heading into the kitchen.

Back at the pub. Diana answers the door. "Where is he" Jarred shouts as he pushes Diana out of the way. "Who" ask Diana. Frank walks out of the kitchen. Jarred look at Frank before saying "Diana, Frank has something to tell. Don't you Frank. Frank tells Diana that he doesn't know what Jarred is on about. "Oh yes you, Diana, Frank has been having an affair with my mother in law" Says Jarred. Diana looks at Frank before slapping him " How could you do this to me again Frank, I can't even look at you, just get out now" shouts Diana

Cal. 30-04-2014 02:12 PM

Hi, this is Cal, Jack.

I really do disagree with the axing of the West sisters, having created them and then have you axe them after they've been in about 3 scenes is obviously offensive to me, especially considering you've already changed my other 2 characters Ziggy and George beyond belief.

Jack. 30-04-2014 04:14 PM

Cal I've pm'd you.

Cal. 30-04-2014 06:35 PM

Where is the announcement? So happy with the turn out. :)

Jack. 30-04-2014 06:37 PM

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Originally Posted by Who Is She? (Post 6822114)
Where is the announcement? So happy with the turn out. :)

I'm just going to finish my college work and then will write up announcement :)

Cal. 30-04-2014 06:45 PM

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Originally Posted by JackF (Post 6822119)
I'm just going to finish my college work and then will write up announcement :)

Sounds good. :spin:

Jack. 16-05-2014 02:15 PM

Episode 10 will be up tonight :)

mizzy25 17-05-2014 02:22 PM

still waiting patiently for ep 10

mizzy25 17-05-2014 09:06 PM

thanks jack I look forward to the next bit.

Jack. 18-05-2014 10:50 AM

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Originally Posted by mizzy25 (Post 6852060)
thanks jack I look forward to the next bit.

I've been out most of the weekend so that's why I've not written up the rest yet :laugh:

Jack. 29-05-2014 11:17 AM

Episode 10

The episode starts with Jarred downing half a bottle of vodka. Maya walks in the Door. "Maya come in here I have something I need to tell you" shouts Jarred from the kitchen. As Maya walks into the kitchen she sees Jarred sat at the table with an empty bottle of vodka. "Your mum has been sleeping with Frank Potter" Jarred says. Maya just ignores Jarred as she knows he's drunk. "You don't believe me do you,I'm telling you the truth" Says Jarred as he stumbles to the bedroom. Maya looks at Jarred before closing the bedroom door.

Meanwhile over at the student house. Cain is moving his stuff into the house. "Hey sexy want a hand moving your stuff in" Izzie asks Cain. He quickly shakes his head before going to get more boxes. "The things I would do to him" Izzie says to herself while watching Cain. Ollie walks In the front door. "Alright Izzie love, I'm making myself a cuppa, Do you want one?" Ollie asks Izzie. She follows Ollie Into the kitchen,"I'll just go see if Cain wants a cuppa" Izzies says. She's goes upstairs to find Cain, As she approaches Cain's room is sees him siting on the bed crying holding a picture in his hand. Izzie Knocks on the door "Cain do you want a cup of tea?" Izzie asks Cain while she try's to see who the picture is of. "I'm fine thanks Izzie,Please don't tell anyone about me crying just then" Cain says to Izzie. Izzie smiles at Cain before leaving the room.

Meanwhile at Heathers house. "Daz is out of hospital today I've told him he can stay here" Heather says to George. George smiles at Heather. "Remember we do whatever he wants get it him" George Tells Heather. She looks at George before walking out of the living room. As Heather walks up the stairs she shouts "Are you coming upstairs or not big boy" George quickly jumps up of the sofa before running upstairs.

Over at the pub. Thomas shouts Diana to come into the living room. As Diana walks into the living she sees Thomas,Samantha and Will siting there. "Mum we have got something to tell you, I've been offered a manager job in posh bar down London." Thomas tells Diana. Di looks at Thomas full shock. "And I've decided to take it, We moving down there on Thursday" Thomas says to Diana as she walks out of the room.

Meanwhile on the estate. Cain is sitting on the bench when he gets a text. As he picks up his phone he sees that the text says"I need to meet you tonight, Meet me at the back of the pub In 15 minutes xx" Cain puts the phone in his pocket before walking towards the pub. "So have you got my stuff?" Cain asks, As the shadow appears from the alleyway "You think I'm just going to give to you, You have to do something for me"

Nick. 29-05-2014 11:11 PM

I'm loving the estate JJ! :):)

Jack. 30-05-2014 09:52 AM

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Originally Posted by Winter99 (Post 6880117)
I'm loving the estate JJ! :):)

Thanks nick :)

Jack. 20-06-2014 08:06 PM

The estate will be back in the autumn. I'm having a revamp of the show atm.

Jack. 25-07-2014 07:39 PM

Announcement in OP

Jack. 26-07-2014 12:01 AM

The Estate(Final Episode) Written by Cal(Who is she?)



The episode begins with the stranger and Cain standing around the back of the pub as the stranger looks threatening towards Cain. “Well, what do you want me to do?” Cain nervously asks, as the stranger points towards the pub. “The woman who owes this…Diana, she owes me money. A lot of money. And I know how desperate you for this smack, so if you want it, you get me my revenge and you torch this place. I want to see her suffer. She’s refused to pay up, and now it’s payback time.” The stranger says, waving the drugs in Cain’s face before walking down the alley way. Cain begins scratching at his hands, it’s now apparent he’s hooked on the drugs and is desperate to do whatever it takes. Inside the pub, Diana serves behind the counter as Frank is upstairs, packing his things after Diana discovered his affair with Andrea. Andrea suddenly appears behind Frank, startling him. “What the hell are you doing here?” Frank demands, as Andrea kisses him playfully. “Have you clearing out has she? Well I think, since she’s downstairs, we could get our last bit of revenge on the old hag.” Andrea says, wrapping her hands around Frank and kissing him. He smiles and looks down on her cheekily. “And what would that be?” Frank flirts, before Andrea shoves the suitcase off of the kings sized bed which Frank and Diana shared as a married couple. “Having sex in her bed!” Andrea says, and Frank laughs, kicking the door closed as giggling is heard.

Downstairs in the pub, Ollie, Izzy, and Lee all enter and sit next to Thomas, Samantha and Will. “What’s up with you?” Izzy asks, as Samantha sighs. “Thomas has got a job down in London, we’re all moving with him but mum doesn’t look too impressed!” Will exclaims, before checking his phone, a reminder flashes up ‘Doctor’s Appointment’. “Look guys, I better get going.” Will says quickly, packing up his things and leaving the pub. “Of course I’m not impressed, we belong here!” Diana urges, having over heard the conversation as Thomas and Samantha scowl at her. “I agree with Diana, you shouldn’t leave!” Ollie says, as Izzy checks her phone as well. “Cain promised he’d meet us here, oh where’s he got to?” Izzy sighs, as Lee smiles briefly and walks to the counter to order drinks. “Haven’t seen you around these parts.” Diana says, as Lee smirks. “I’m staying with Bianca and her lot, we kind of had a holiday romance!” Lee reveals, as Diana smiles and takes his order of drinks cheekily.

As Daz sits on the sofa in the living room of Heather’s house, Heather sits in the kitchen nervously tapping her foot as George enters with a brown bag. “What’s up with you?” George asks, producing the tape and the gun from the bag. “I’m nervous, do you not realize what we’re about to do?” Heather says, as George gestures for her to keep her voice down. “George, I don’t think I can do this.” Heather says, as George produces the tape and quickly wraps it around her mouth and then tapes her hands together firm with them behind her back. “You can and you will!” George urges, before loading his gun and grabbing Heather, kicking the living room door open and throwing her to the floor. Daz quickly jumps in fright and George produces the gun on him as Daz puts his hands up. “Woah, George, what the ****?” Daz shouts, as George grabs him and points the gun at his head. “Listen, gay boy, you do what I said and you and her survive this, understood?” George says, as Daz gulps nervously and looks at a terrified Heather who is lying on the ground tied up.

At Elissa’s house, she sits on the bottom step reading the threatening letter she received, before another letter is posted through the letter box. She quickly grabs it, revealing another threatening message, before tearing open the front door as someone tears down the path. Elissa chases after them and grabs the figure by their hair, pulling them back into the house. “Who the hell are you?” Elissa demands, spinning the figure around to reveal…Bianca. “You!” Elissa shouts, as Bianca looks at her shocked before smiling. “Surprised?” Bianca taunts, as Elissa looks at her in shock. Back at the pub, Diana continues to serve behind the bar as Jarred and Maya enter the pub. “We’re still welcome here, aren’t we?” Maya asks worriedly, as Diana smiles. “As long as your skank of a mother isn’t in my pub I’m fine.” Diana says, as Maya looks awkward. Upstairs, Frank and Andrea continue to roll around under the duvet, laughing.

Outside, Cain sighs and kicks the back door of the pub, before it suddenly caves in and falls down, allowing him access to the cellar. He looks shocked, before rubbing the back of his neck and he begins to receive withdrawal symptoms. He looks back at the stranger, who dangles the drugs in front of him, before Cain looks back at the cellar and enters quickly, kicking over the barrels and letting the alcohol spill out onto the floor. He grabs a newspaper from the stack, before producing his cigarette lighter, holding him close to the newspaper for a few moments, gulping nervously, before setting the newspaper on fire and dropping it onto the alcohol, watching it go up in flames quickly before he rushes back out of the door. The stranger smiles at the orange glows as Cain makes his way toward him and then hands Cain the packet of drugs, walking off into the night.

Inside Heather’s house, Heather cries are muffled from the tape on her mouth as Daz looks at George scared. Daz sits on the sofa as George holds the gun to his head. “You heard me loud and clear, you either sign the cheque of all your inheritance over to me…or SHE DIES.” George shouts, aiming the gun at Heather as she cries on the floor. Daz gulps, before frantically retrieving a cheque book from the drawer in the coffee table. George hands him a pen, as Daz shakily writes the cheque out for twenty give grand. George smiles, before Daz slowly rips the cheque out of the book and hands it George with shaking hands. “It’s been a pleasure Daz…but you should probably know something. Your dearest friend Heather has been in on this scam the whole time, we set this up, she knew I was going to do this because she wanted the money. And you know what else? She isn’t having one penny!” George says, before kicking Daz in the stomach to prevent him from giving chase and running out of the house. Heather shouts at George, screaming and kicking as he has set her up.

“Why have you been doing this?” Elissa demands to Bianca, who stares at her with slight worry. “Because you, you know what you did!” Bianca exclaims, as Elissa gulps. “What have I done?” Elissa demands as Bianca rolls her eyes. “You said those horrible things at my Callum’s funeral! Blaming me, you bitch!” Bianca shouts, launching herself at Elissa who darts out the way and kicks her, rushing to the phone in the hallway and hurriedly calling 999. “Police please, yes, I’d like to report a stalking incident-27 The Estate!” Elissa explains over the phone as Bianca suddenly grabs her and knocks her to the floor. “You bitch!” Bianca shouts, slapping Elissa who screams and pushes her off, rushing out of the front door and out onto the front lawn as sirens arise in the distance. Bianca looks at her in shock on the doorstep, as Joe and Emily Spencer appear over the road, glaring at Bianca. “Mum, what have you done?” Emily says, before the police show up in front of the home.
Inside the pub, the fire slowly spreads through the cellar door, as in the pub Diana smiles as the party is in full swing. Thomas moves towards the bar, drunkenly smiling at Diana. “You ain’t half bad mum, but you need to let me go.” Thomas says, as Diana smiles. “I know, I know, I’m sorry. It’s just, I don’t want to admit that you 3 are growing up, I love you all too much!” Diana says, just as suddenly a huge explosion flies through the cellar and fire roars into the bar. Screams and shouts echo through the pub as Diana is knocked to the floor and Thomas is propelled back into the wall by the explosion. “THOMAS!” Samantha screeches, shaking Thomas on the floor as tables smash through the windows and fly out onto the estate. Izzie and Ollie lay on the floor unconscious, as the fire roars through the bar area and up the stairs. The camera pans to Lee, who is already crushed by tables and he is most definitely dead.

At the doctors, Will walks out of the room after speaking to the doctor. “Yes thank you, Dr. Kalid, so there’s definitely nothing to worry about?” Will asks, as Dr. Kalid smiles. “I can understood why you are worried, especially due to the history of testicular cancer in your family but like I said, the lump is just what it is and is nothing to be of concern at this point.” The doctor explains, as Will smiles and thanks him, walking out of the doctors surgery and smiling, a huge weight lifted off his shoulders. At the estate, Cain walks around the streets, out of it, before looking down at his phone. He notices a text of Izzie explaining they are at the pub, as he looks in shock and looks back at the burning pub. Inside the pub, Samantha shakes Thomas violently, crying as he refuses to wake-up. Dave Anderson, Jarred and Maya hurry to Samantha and pull her away. “NO!” Savannah shouts, but they hurry her out the doors as the fire rages and the fire engines pulls up with sirens blazing. “You’ll die in there!” Maya shouts, hugging Samantha as Jarred rushes back into the pub.

He jumps over the bar and finds Diana on the floor, pulling her up and over the bar and out of the doors. She’s unconscious and he lays her out on the floor as Samantha rushes over to her and cries. Cain suddenly rushes towards the pub, bursting in through the doors and trying to desperately locate Izzie and Ollie. He is unable to find them, as the fire finally reaches the heated liquor battles and a second huge explosion tears through the pub. It bursts through the structure of the pub with debris flying everywhere. The camera pans into the remainders of upstairs with everywhere covered with fire…Frank and Andrea are definitely dead, and so are Cain, Thomas, Izzie and Ollie. Outside, Diana stirs and Samantha cries. “Where’s Thomas?” Diana shouts, as Samantha looks up at the boring pub in horror. “Mum!” Will shouts, rushing towards them as the fire fighters attempt to put the fire in the pub out.

Across the estate, the police officers put Bianca in a car as Elissa watches in horror. Joe and Emily cry at the door to their house, and Bianca puts her hand on the window, crying, before the police car drives off. Joe and Emily break down, as Elissa sits on the wall with a blanket behind her, staring at them evilly and talking to a police officer at the same time. Outside The West House, George pulls up in a brand new sports car as Tanya, Jackie and Ziggy get out. “Woah!” Ziggy explains as George smiles. “I got lucky, now get in!” George says, and they do, before the whole family speed off in the sports car. Inside Heather’s house, Daz and Heather stare at each other in silence with Daz having released Heather from her bounds. She breaks down crying, as he looks at her disgusted. The screen fades to black.

Jack. 26-07-2014 12:02 AM

Thank you so much cal for writing such a great episode :)


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