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Shaun 15-03-2009 05:42 AM

Finding the words.
 
wut

Lewis. 15-03-2009 07:34 AM

Wow! I Love it :lovedup:

Magic 15-03-2009 09:02 AM

Ohh, I really really like it. I think you have used some good words and metaphors, but to one bit seem a bit predictable?

''I crawl towards the exit, seeking air to breathe,
praying for escape from the tangled webs I weave''

No offense, but I swear similar stuff has featured in alot of poems, and I think to improve it, maybe bits like this good be revised?

Otherwise, I love it! Alot better than what I could do! Well done!

Harry! 15-03-2009 12:51 PM

Good poem!

Shaun 15-03-2009 04:52 PM

jesus


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