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15-03-2009, 05:42 AM
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15-03-2009, 07:34 AM
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Wow! I Love it
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15-03-2009, 09:02 AM
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Ohh, I really really like it. I think you have used some good words and metaphors, but to one bit seem a bit predictable?
''I crawl towards the exit, seeking air to breathe, praying for escape from the tangled webs I weave'' No offense, but I swear similar stuff has featured in alot of poems, and I think to improve it, maybe bits like this good be revised? Otherwise, I love it! Alot better than what I could do! Well done! |
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15-03-2009, 12:51 PM
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Good poem!
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15-03-2009, 04:52 PM
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