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Old 31-05-2010, 04:14 PM #1
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One By One

- Ross
- Vicky
- Caitlin
- Shaun
- Lili
- James (Lemonjam)
- Ben
- Eoin
- Claudia


Day 31
Whizzing through the unlit cave, the smooth sound of waves crashing against the dense rocks outside was all that could be heard. The grungy stench of rot lingered throughout the cave as a pile of fly infested dead bodies lay on the cave floor. A large pool of deep red blood was spread out around the infested bodies and it flowed down through the entrance of the cave and out onto the sandy beach. A mysterious figure walked across the cave and to a large rock. The figure bent down and searched the ground for a loose stone. The large rock had 7 small lines scratched into it, in the form of a tally. Picking up a small rock, the figure glanced over at the heap of bodies before picking up the large rock and scratching another line into if furiously.

Day 1
Sitting harmoniously, a beach lies empty, with only the soft waves brushing slowly against the warm sand. The blue sky had not a cloud in sight and the large yellow sun shone down onto the island, brightening up even the darkest of coves that lay in the forest that stood in the middle of the island. There isn't a bird in sight or a sound to be heard as the waves continue flowing in and out.
5000 feet above, a large plane comes thundering down at hundreds of miles an hour. The plane has lost it's left wing and the peaceful beach becomes a raging ball of fire as the plane hits the ground with a thundering crash.

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Really good Lewis!

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Thanks guys. The plot will become more apparent in the next episode. It features TiBB members as you can probably tell, but that's all i'm saying at the moment. It is going to be a story that will keep you guessing
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Is it like lost?

Sounds good so far dude
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Is this like Lost?

Good so far!
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The plane crash is the only thing about it that is like lost. I don't want to reveal much but basically it may seem a little like Lost, but in fact when we get near the end you will see that it is in fact totally different. The title has a lot to do with the actual plot
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And also - make sure you notice the Day 31 and Day 1 at the top - they are two completely different times
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The plane crash is the only thing about it that is like lost. I don't want to reveal much but basically it may seem a little like Lost, but in fact when we get near the end you will see that it is in fact totally different. The title has a lot to do with the actual plot
Will be looking forward to see what happens.

Im guessing the user named aboved will die one by one.
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The plane crash is the only thing about it that is like lost. I don't want to reveal much but basically it may seem a little like Lost, but in fact when we get near the end you will see that it is in fact totally different. The title has a lot to do with the actual plot
Do the people die one by one D;
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You'll all just have to wait and see
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Looks like this will be good Lewis!
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Thankyou Harry I hope you all do enjoy it because I've been working on it for a little while now
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Day 1
Pillowing out of the large plane, huge masses of grey smoke rose into the summer sky. The plane lay dormant and only a feminine voice could be heard, screaming from the broken up plane.
"MARTIN!" the voice sharply screeched, "Martin!". Another despaired voice bellowed out of the plane.
"HELLO? HELP!" the voice shouted. It was a much more masculine voice.
"MARTIN! Is that you?" the feminine voice screamed again.
"It's Ben.. I'm Ben!" Bellowed back Ben. A figure stepped up from the plane. It was a female. Blood was pouring from her arm and her petrified face was covered in a thick layer of grey ash, with tear marks pouring down from her bloodshot eyes. Her hair was covered in thick gunk and her clothes were covered in thick ash. The female screamed back, finding her way through the thick cloud of ash that arose from the plane.
"Where are you? BEN?" the female screamed loudly. There was a loud clanging noise as a seat fell forward and Ben stepped up hesitantly.
"I'm here! I'm here!" Ben ran through the smoke waving his arms in the air.
"Hello?" A number of voices called from beyond the smoke. Ben carried on running furiously. Like the female, he was covered in ash. Ben had a big build and was very muscular. As he ran, a determined look spread throughout his face and he reached the other side of the smoke to find a group of 8 ash covered people. All looking extremely out of breath and panting.
Ben shouted, "There's someone back there!" before falling to the floor in a heap as the plane behind him exploded into hundreds of pieces, flying through the air and into the sea around the group of people, who all ducked low onto the floor to avoid the shrapnel that sped above them. Before anyone could say a thing the woman ran out of the smoke, collapsing on the floor in a frenzy of screams.
"MARTIN! MARTIN!". Punching the floor, the woman carried on screaming and sobbing. Sand flew in all directions as she swiped her fists, too exhausted to stand up. The group of people all ran over to the woman shouting. A tall, scraggly man bent onto his knees. His hair was swept to the side, but covered in ash and rubble. He sat and comforted the woman, who for two seconds looked slightly relieved as he grabbed her and hugged her.
"MARTIN! Is that you?", She broke from the hug to frantically examine man.
"No, I'm James". The woman started screaming again and James squeezed her tightly as she sobbed into his shoulder. The rest of the group looked helplessly at the two, a few of them wiping themselves down, all still in shock to what had just happened.
A man had ran over to Ben, who was lying unconscious on the soft sand. The man had dark black hair and a White stripes T-shirt on. He bent down frantically and started shouting at Ben.
"Hello! Hello! My name is Shaun! Can you hear me?!", he shook Ben, who slowly opened his eyes, "HELLO!". Ben looked startled and pushed Shaun away. Shaun took Ben's hand and pulled him up as the rest of the group ran over to them, the woman still crying frantically.
"Caitlin! We need to go. Please! He's gone Caitlin.. he's gone!" James spoke frantically to Caitlin who was still in a state of craziness. She screamed once again as James picked her up and the group ran off into the distance.

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- The group get to know each over as they prepare for their first night on the island.
- As a new day dawns, the group go back to the wreckage to look for more survivors but get a shock which leads them to believe that they are not alone on the island.
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Bumping for those who have not seen
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Awesome Lewis. Really like it.
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Thankyou Ross.
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Oh i dodnt get a chance to read this becuase I was doing The Asylum, very good Lewis, looking forward to reading more.
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Thankyou Eoin
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Berhump Another episode later
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I take that back - no more episodes tonight. Had a little bit of a brain surge and decided to change the storyline a tiny bit.. so shall need to re-write what I had already - only slightly.
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Been so busy at work that I forgot about this. Is anyone reading anyway?
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