[Ninastar]

yay

[Tom]

Ah well, thanks anyway Darenn

[Loukas]

Thank you Darren, once again fair points.

[Sam]

yeah thanks.

[Nicky.]

Ah well, well done guys :3

[Harry!]

Oinks to win!

[Matt]

JOSHUAH! is the final person to judge.

Over to him...

[JOSHUAH!]

First of all I’d just like to say this was all done on short notice so I may not have the expertise to say what I think of both your stories.

TEAM FETCH
I think both stories have a real burst of imagination, in the way of presenting them and in the way of describing each character. I especially think Team Fetch were brilliant to use The Sims 2, the images made it slightly better to read and it got more people focused in on the story. However, I do feel Team Fetch lacked that urgency and entertainment value, I feel like there was no fun, it is very serious and I didn’t really like the setting. I think setting is a huge part of a story and to be centred in a therapist’s office is particularly boring. Yes, I can imagine Team Fetch wanted the story to be focused on the plot, which is true, but setting adds to entertainment, to persuasiveness to make the reader continue reading on, and I felt really bored after the first few lines, because of the setting. The style of writing however was really good and whoever written it done well, there were those lines which made you chuckle and the odd serious one too. Overall though, I’d argue that if the story was set somewhere else it would have been much more enticing to read. Maybe I’m just one of those people who prefers and adventure, and I think I am.

I have to commend Team Fetch on the idea to bring in The Sims 2 because that is imaginative, I just think it’s a shame you weren’t so imaginative on the setting. I think the basic skeleton of the plot is good, but as your title says, think ‘Outside of the Box’ and don’t set it inside a therapist’s room! It could have been somewhere else which would have been way more interesting and less stereotypical and unoriginal.

TEAM OINK'S
Team Oink’s story is amazing. The first thing I noticed was that it is an adventure, and I always do genuinely prefer an adventure story. I thought the tie in with Britney was very funny, seeing as there are many fans of her on TiBB. The writing is great and whoever written the story done very well. I think the plot is a great idea, it’s comical and it’s obviously based on the Wizard of Oz which shows creativeness because you adapted it to people from TiBB themselves.

Throughout the story I felt like I needed to carry on reading. It was comical, serious, tongue in cheek and just a very feel good story. As with Team Fetch bringing in The Sims 2, I have to also commend Team Oink’s for bringing in the interactive vote. It was great that we got to vote on how the story turned out, it shows participation and also it meant people HAD to read your story to see the final product.

Both teams had a good amount of text, a good plot and good ways of presenting their stories. Good Luck!

[Nicky.]

Thanks Josh!

We all wrote it, Sam the start, me the middle and Tom did the endings

[Tom]

We split the story up into 3 and all did part each so its all of us that written it

Thanks Joshuah

[Sam]

Ta Josh.

[Shaun]

iirc, Fetch's is the one about mental illness and Oinks' is the one where Madonna and Fom go to see Britney, right?

Either way, the one about seeing Britney was a bit unoriginal. It seemed to me just a way of ticking the boxes with forum members. I can imagine this being pitched in a boardroom and all the boring executives asking "can we throw in some Britney? Sales should boost by 40%". I did, however, think the interactive element was a stroke of genius

Call me biased if you will, but I preferred the Fetch one. It was different, but Magic's claim of plagiarism (or at least using a similar character to the book he mentioned) is interesting. I haven't read it, so I can't comment. But yeah, it was more interesting to read than the other story.

[JOSHUAH!]

So, with everything taken into account, I prefer
TEAM OINK'S story

[Tom]

Yay!! Thanks so much

[Sam]

Four wins...

[Loukas]

Drat! Well Done Team Oinks!

[Nicky.]

Thank youuu!!

[JOSHUAH!]

Picto I appreciate you're point, I'm not saying Team Fetch's story should have been set in a fairground, just somewhere more original than a phsyciatrists office.

[Locke.]

Yes!!

[Matt]

Thank you Joshuah!.

This means that the score is Oinks 2, Fetch 1 - meaning that Fetch face the firing.

As there are only three candidates left in the team, all three will face the firing.

[Sam]

I hope you stay Loukas, but good luck to all Fetch.

[Tom]

Good luck

[Nicky.]

Good luck

[Matt]

...but before Team Fetch plead their cases, I'd like to inform you all of some news.

Earlier this week, both team leaders, Nicky (Oinks) and Sam (Team Fetch), who were both elected by their teams, were offered a secret mission.

Their mission, should they have accepted it, was to become saboteurs, doing everything in their power to make their team fail the task.

If they had succeeded in making their team fail, they would have automatically passed through the firing - meaning their two team mates would have been sent packing.

But did they accept the offer?...

[Tom]

Originally posted by Picto
iirc, Fetch's is the one about mental illness and Oinks' is the one where Madonna and Fom go to see Britney, right?

Either way, the one about seeing Britney was a bit unoriginal. It seemed to me just a way of ticking the boxes with forum members. I can imagine this being pitched in a boardroom and all the boring executives asking "can we throw in some Britney? Sales should boost by 40%". I did, however, think the interactive element was a stroke of genius

Call me biased if you will, but I preferred the Fetch one. It was different, but Magic's claim of plagiarism (or at least using a similar character to the book he mentioned) is interesting. I haven't read it, so I can't comment. But yeah, it was more interesting to read than the other story.

Hold on, who was it who included Mean Girls references in their team identity to try and make it more popular?