[Benjamin]

Originally Posted by Stu

Honestly I really don't see the need to patronize the reader by trying to sound intelligent with the awkward Dr. Phil stuff in the opening sentences. Just tell the story and let the psychology of it speak for itself. It doesn't need to be there.

You don't see J.K. Rowling start off a chapter of Harry Potter And The Law Of Diminishing Returns with something like 'Here's my analysis : Voldemort's clearly a bit of a tit and Harry has those issues we see in most adolescent boys, anyway ... back to the story'.

Please never compare writing to JK Rowling.

Her style is fantasy writing (not very good either others do it better, she just happened to be the lucky writer lapped up by the world).